In some organizations, promotions are based on seniority, while in other oraganizations, promotions are based on performance
The sentence "In some organizations, promotions are based on seniority, while in other organizations, promotions are based on performance" is a complex and controversial one. I partially agree and partially disagree with this statement. I provide my reasons, evidences in following paragraphs to support my view on this statement.
The organization system holds a complex structure.One can observe the presence of different category of workers at different levels. It must be noted that the size of organization is proportional to number of workers in the organization. Among workers of same genre there will be presence of competition for sure. Out of this competition there will be a dominance of some workers among the group with some special abilities. In order to preserve such workers organization system developed a pattern called "salary hike" or "promotions" whenever there is a profitable transaction from the unit the worker is working. This practice leads to encouragement to worker who received it and works with more confidence which helps the organization cumulatively.
But this system of practice raised a conflict between the management and workers because the cumulative work of senior who worked for more time in the organization and for the organization is more in some case than the worker who is newly arrived and contributed a large part in success. So this conflict can be resolved by the harmony present in among the board members of the organization. They may give importance to the seniority by keeping in mind that foundation of building(senior's work) is more important than decoration(newly arrived person's work) done to building after completion of construction. But this re-energizes the senior to work in more efficient manner in his upgraded post by using all his previous experience.
On the other hand, working smart always pays you wealth and fame in return for sure is the famous principle believed and said or shared by many instructors in this business world,where money and popularity are two important attributes to measure the level of person. So if the board of directors develops this approach of thinking then the newly arrived or junior who worked smart gets beneficial. This helps the individual to work in more smart in order to compete for the next level and to contribute a lot to organization.
More precisely speaking both the approaches has their implicit deficiencies which leads to the failure of the organization. If the senior is honored that contributes for the depression among the new worker's because to achieve a promotion they need to work for long period. On the other hand if newly arrived is honored this may lead to conflicts between senior workers who build the foundation for organization and the organization.
As I have provided irrefutable reasons in context of given sentence, I finally conclude by saying that this sentence is partially agreeable.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246124031008 0.229887763892 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.162790697674 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.077519379845 0.0866891130778 89% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0329457364341 0.046263068375 71% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0271317829457 0.0685040099705 40% => OK
Prepositions: 0.15503875969 0.118717715034 131% => OK
Participles: 0.046511627907 0.0351676179071 132% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.2729746501 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0329457364341 0.0309702414327 106% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.116279069767 0.0887237588012 131% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0135658914729 0.0209618222197 65% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0174418604651 0.0139019557991 125% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2964.0 2387.08602151 124% => OK
No of words: 470.0 408.028673835 115% => OK
Chars per words: 6.30638297872 5.86048508987 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.368085106383 0.338922669872 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.31914893617 0.251872472559 127% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.231914893617 0.174417080927 133% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.168085106383 0.112833075102 149% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2729746501 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48085106383 0.524397521467 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.720774985 59.2087087015 92% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.5 20.5533526081 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7965396888 48.84282405 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.2 120.699889404 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.5533526081 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.644075263715 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 55.414893617 45.7405998639 121% => OK
Elegance: 2.00869565217 1.45489161554 138% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170821090429 0.300154397459 57% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.14088408508 0.103427244359 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.103505444549 0.0752933317313 137% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.607951727024 0.497263757937 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.155604654973 0.151897553556 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761327001539 0.114077575197 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151859209798 0.0781384742642 194% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.338552732804 0.336927656856 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.197538611344 0.067059652881 295% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140933755367 0.210909579961 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.178518299511 0.0618886996521 288% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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