Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
In my opinion, it is absolutely the wrong idea for parents to allow their children to have smart phones. They are immensely distracting, expensive, and unhealthy.
Cell phones have the power to distract young students from schoolwork. Rather than paying attention in class, students try to sneak opportunities to play on their phones. Instead of thinking about schoolwork, they obsessively text each other and try to check sites like Facebook. This takes time away from valuable studying. This is a problem both during school and afterwards, when youngsters should be working on their homework.
At the same time, smart phones can be extremely costly. Many plans require parents to pay abusively high monthly rates. At times, these rates can climb even higher if children use too much data due to things like downloading songs on the Internet. Rather than wasting money on a phone, parents should use the funds on better causes, like tutors for their children, or a home computer on which supervised learning can take place.
Finally, smart phones can be dangerous for young children. We are still unsure medically what the long term effects of exposure to cell phones are, particularly on vulnerable groups such as children. It would be better to be safe than sorry. The less exposure children have to potential toxins, the better. At the same time, kids are sometimes targeted on social media sites by dangerous strangers. If parents allow young children to have smart phones, it might be difficult to protect them in the long term from these kinds of threats.
While older children may sometimes need them to stay in touch with their parents due to their many obligations outside of the house after school, there is little cause for younger children to own them. Parents should encourage their children to read and think in their spare time, developing their minds. Smart phones are unhelpful when it comes to this goal.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'such as', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.237430167598 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.148044692737 0.158761421928 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.125698324022 0.0866891130778 145% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0418994413408 0.046263068375 91% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0558659217877 0.0685040099705 82% => OK
Prepositions: 0.120111731844 0.118717715034 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0251396648045 0.0351676179071 71% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.48495472796 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0502793296089 0.0309702414327 162% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0586592178771 0.0887237588012 66% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0279329608939 0.0209618222197 133% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0111731843575 0.0139019557991 80% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1932.0 2387.08602151 81% => OK
No of words: 320.0 408.028673835 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.0375 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48200974243 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.34375 0.338922669872 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.253125 0.251872472559 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.178125 0.174417080927 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115625 0.112833075102 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48495472796 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58125 0.524397521467 111% => OK
Word variations: 64.1662426678 59.2087087015 108% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.5533526081 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4999712644 48.84282405 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6 120.699889404 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.5533526081 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.644075263715 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 41.3125 45.7405998639 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.55681818182 1.45489161554 107% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234926434413 0.300154397459 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0787967756186 0.103427244359 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0722717605586 0.0752933317313 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.479297290019 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15692824374 0.151897553556 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886281664399 0.114077575197 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502419737816 0.0781384742642 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.25417947066 0.336927656856 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0542993316058 0.067059652881 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159541132343 0.210909579961 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413020590103 0.0618886996521 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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