From many teachers vantage point, the School-age for the most children and their families is an element that is set to assume a great influence on future of mostly all families in all over the world. On the first side, from many people point of view, Some parents claim that offer money to their school-aged children for each high mark that they get in school could be a good opinion. On the other side, some sociologists argue, it is a bad habit that parents’ children encourage their children in school-aged that they will receive money from emerging a high grade from the school. While both sides are taking their own positions, the second view also has some proponents. From my view point, the latter attitude carries more weight. In the following, I will delve into some conspicuous aspects which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
In the first aspect, a great proportion of parents claims that the more they use the money to encourage kids to get a better grade the more and harder they study their books in their school. What thinkers mean to discuss is this, the harder kids study the fewer parents spend their time and money for their education. For instance, there are schools that force kids to enroll extra classes that charge parents a lot in many countries. Therefore, in most cases, fathers prefer to give this money to their children to achieve each high grade instead of paying it for extra classes. On the other hand, from other parents' vantage point, kids will be money oriented if they have to charge the child for each high school’s grade. In the other words, children would think this manner of earning money is a game. For example, children expect to earn money for every good job that they do in every aspect of their lives. However, we as parents not only do not clean our home for money but also we do lots of tasks for free as a volunteer to help ordinary people. Thus, the promise of getting paid as a reward for good grades is not really a reward. So much so that, it would vanish the sense of group working and voluntary tasks.
Alongside with the first reason elaborated above, from sociologists’ perspective, it is a bad and harmful habit that pay your kids for getting a high mark in the school. To shed more light on the issue, with the manner of paying cash for each good grade, the meaning of learning would no longer exist. Here is one example of what erudite thinkers mean, kids may think learning and getting high scores in the schools’ tests are all about the money, they may not understand the goal of schools’ tests is to encourage them to learn new material, like the time that the child cheat on the exam just because of earning more money, like an Xbox game that just they want to win the game. On the other side of the rope, there are positive feedbacks if parents encourage the children with the way that they understand more. To illustrate, most of the kids love to enjoy eating chocolates, so from many sociologists’ idea, parents should offer types of tasty chocolates for encouraging children to achieve a high grade in their schools. For example, a big chocolate cake for finishing each school season. Thus, it would have lots of good ways to encourage kids to get high marks from their school staff if parents could use other rewards instead of Money.
All in all, to put everything in a nutshell, a broad look at the main points and discussions, it can be easily assumed that if parents pay money to kids as a reward for schools’ grades, this manner would kill the sense of humanity. Moreover, there are lots of good ways to encourage kids to get high marks from their school staff if parents want too.
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in most cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 96.0 52.1666666667 184% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3416.0 1977.66487455 173% => OK
No of words: 731.0 407.700716846 179% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6730506156 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.19971265256 4.48103885553 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41585550438 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.40218878249 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1011.6 618.680645161 164% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 4.94265232975 405% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2610255315 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.866666667 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3666666667 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.53405017921 176% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.599154735345 0.236089414692 254% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181580821735 0.076458572812 237% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15193932891 0.0737576698707 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316840744857 0.150856017488 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.229364358316 0.0645574589148 355% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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