Some people believe that children nowadays have too much freedom. Others believe that children are protected too much by their parents. Which of these statements do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your decision.
These days life is not the same that it was even fifty years before. I personally think that nowadays children are protected too much by their parents. There are a few reasons why I feel this way.
One of the reasons is that in modern world education plays crucial role in terms of success. Parents try to do their best to provide kids with an feasibility to attend a college or university. Therefore, they control the children by checking grades and participating in the learning process actively. If they take the educational process for granted, they are likely to overlook a drawback the child may has been experiencing, and thus, decrease his chances on a satisfactory future. Although some parents do not put as much pressure on kids to study well, the majority thinks that this is their parental commitment to take part in stimulating the children`s intelligence. To that end, parents today are quite authoritarian to children pursuing the aim for kids to excel.
Another reason is that everyday media tell a myriad of stories on TV and newspapers, narrating about crimes and troubles of young generations. Drugs, tobacco and alcohol became a tremendous problem. Millions of people get abused every year. This way, liable parents, who care about their children, try to protect kids by constraining their freedom in a certain degree. For instance, the parents say what time the child is supposed to be home from a party. If parents let to the children do whatever they want, it is possible for the kid to be involved in a variety of egregious activities. Despite on an oppinion that parents have to give to kids to choose their own way in life, it is obvious, that it is possible merely for kinds who are well- adjusted. So, awareness of the parents in problems of the modern youth make them to control their children.
To sum it up, I feel that today parents are trying to shelter their kids substantially. This is because they want to enable kids to gain advantageous education and to confine them form some negative effects of life. All things considered it is reasonable to assume that modern parents put a lot of efforts to ensure successful and save future for their small ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
These days life is not the same that it was even f...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... are a few reasons why I feel this way. One of the reasons is that in modern wor...
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Line 2, column 144, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...y to do their best to provide kids with an feasibility to attend a college or univ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1822.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8073878628 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74207356315 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5672823219 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9514898424 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192960977318 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633295942562 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836078541253 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136895964019 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725407699683 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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