Some people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand.
When people choose a job, they usually consider several aspects. One of them is finding the perfect balance between work and life, career advancement, and salary. However, if I’m forced to choose, I will prefer to earn a lot of money because a six-figure salary can provide us the means to give our children better health care, education, and foster our psychological welfare.
First and foremost, earning large amounts of money can help us to give our juveniles the optimal health care. Indeed, kids get sick a lot and hospitals bills are expensive too. For example, my brother has his own company. He has two daughters and they get sick at least twice a month, like any child. But when they feel tired, my brother does not have to worry about the medical bills or if his offspring are being treated by the best doctors. This is because money does not play a factor in his life. Therefore, earning big portions of money will secure better health care for our children.
In addition, making large amounts of money can help parents to save money for their children’s education. For instance, my father is a doctor and he has his own clinic. When it was the time for me to choose which college to attend, the college tuition was not a factor because my dad was able to save up. I was fortunate enough to attend one of the ivy league universities in my hometown and to be surrounded by renowned faculty members. Hence, high income can assist parents in providing their children the opportunity to be taught under a highly advanced teaching environment.
Last but not least, earning a huge amount of money can aid us in unwinding. Of course, this lifestyle can aid us in channeling our negative emotions into positive ones, especially since we can spend money freely on vacations and luxury items. To illustrate, one of my friends is a doctor and she always complains how is hectic to work more than eight hours a day. But what is keeping her to feel motivated and energetic, is having a high-paying job. Because she has the means to go on vacations at least three time a year and loosen up. , Consequently, having flexible income give us the methods to spend money freely which, in turn, will help us to boost our state of mind and have the chance to smell the roses every now and then.
In conclusion, it is irrefutable that life is becoming expensive. Therefore, I prefer to make excess amounts of money in order to be able to take care of my children when it comes to health and education, and to maintain an intact mental health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, then, therefore, as for, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64159292035 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52397149272 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533185840708 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0977017826 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2173913043 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.652173913 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30434782609 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106217862869 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0330133377198 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049508603246 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0655883568948 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167410484944 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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