Some people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand.
When people choose a job, they usually consider several aspects. One of them is finding the perfect balance between work and life, career advancement, and salary. However, if I’m forced to choose, I will prefer to earn a lot of money because a six-figure salary can provide us the means to give our children better health care, education, and foster our psychological welfare.
First and foremost, earning large amounts of money can help us to give our juveniles the optimal health care. Indeed, kids get sick a lot and hospitals bills are expensive too. For example, my brother has his own company. He has two daughters, unfortunately, they get sick at least twice a month, like any child. But when they feel tired, my brother does not have to worry about the medical bills or if his offspring are being treated by the best doctors. This is because money does not play a factor in his life. Therefore, earning big portions of money will secure better health care for our children.
In addition, making large amounts of money can help parents to save money for their children’s education. For instance, my father is a doctor and he has his own clinic. When it was the time for me to choose which college to attend, the college tuition was not a factor because my dad was able to save up. I was fortunate enough to attend one of the ivy league universities in my hometown and to be surrounded by renowned faculty members. So, if my father had not earned so much money, I would not have had the opportunity to go to a high-ranked school. Hence, high income can assist parents in providing their children the opportunity to be taught under a highly advanced teaching environment.
Last but not least, earning a huge amount of money can aid us in unwinding. Of course, this lifestyle can aid us in channeling our negative emotions into positive ones, especially since we can spend money freely on vacations and luxury items. To illustrate, one of my friends is a doctor and she always complains how is hectic to work more than eight hours a day. But what is keeping her to feel motivated and energetic, is having a high-paying job. Because she has the means to go on vacations at least three time a year and loosen up. Consequently, having a flexible income gives us the methods to spend money freely which, in turn, will help us to boost our state of mind and have the chance to smell the roses every now and then.
In conclusion, it is irrefutable that life is becoming expensive and we must make ends meet. Therefore, I prefer to make excess amounts of money in order to be able to take care of my children when it comes to health and education, and to maintain an intact mental health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, as for, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2226.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61825726141 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55964472793 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52489626556 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.129465465 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.75 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0833333333 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.20833333333 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113958347378 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0354057129143 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481209879693 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0707715334905 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199859073368 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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