Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The relationship between a progenitor and a progeny is probably one of the most intricate ones among all other human connections. The degree to which we rely on our fathers or mothers is unlikey to be matched by anything. After all, they are the only people that we spend most of our lives with in the early stages of our existence. In my view, in face of increasingly limited time that parents possess, it is far more expedient if they are able to help their children in things related to school work, I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the primary function of a responsibile parent is to have a constructive contribution in a child's healthy development both physically and behavorially. Moreover, parents' oversight is of utmost importance in determining whether a student can be successful at school. Of course, lack of such supervision would lead to some undesirable outcomes. For instance, my brother who is short of eight years younger than me , was unfortunately deprived of a consistence care in this regard. Being only eight myself, I could not help him much with his lessons and nor could our parents as they were both busy working at a newspaper for most part of the day. The result of this was regrettably unfortunate. He had a difficult time adapting hemself to the new school environment and was unable to complete his homeworks approprietly. Therefore, he faced enormous challenges early on at school and had it not been because of his high intelligence, he might not have endured much under those cirmustances.
Furthermore, the role of a playmate can be sufficiently played by a child's friends. Indeed children do prefer to have fun with others at their same age. Consequently, instead of allocating their precious time in order to entertain their pupils, it is more plausible to assist them in establishing a wide network of friends. An observation I made in one of my classes clearly illustrates this. At my spare time, I used to teach french to children aged between 8-12. Having just recenly completing an intermediate course in french I was attempting to improve my french by this means. Basically, there were two types of students in our class. One were the children with parents that were deligently following the progress of their children while others had parents that whose only concern was that their beloved ones be happy. After spending a long time as a teacher there, I noticed that the first group were comparatively more competent in learning and interestingly had more friends. It seemed as though the second group relied more on their parents for almost everything and were not as outgoing.
In sum, for the reasons mentioned above along with various others, I strongly believe that it is incumbent upon parents to participate more in their children educational process.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, after all, for instance, i feel, of course, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2390.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91769547325 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90164880626 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549382716049 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6629851932 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.913043478 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1304347826 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.60869565217 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237101186969 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590406431434 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588671115112 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130605070908 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508803290366 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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