Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I strongly believe that parents should spend their limited time to paly game and sports with their children and the following lines will elaborate more on this perspective.
The main aspect to point out is that parents can teach many useful facts or even educational subjects through games to their children. Of course, it can be argued that school works are highly important and children can learn better from their parents. Also, it can be said that if parents spend their time on helping their children doing their schoolwork, children can realize the value of education. However, children love games and have fun especially with their parents. If parents select appropriate games and sports meticulously not only can they have fun with their children but also help them learn educational issues. For example, there is a park in the middle of Tehran, which is built based on psychological surveys. It is divided into sections of a town. One part represent a main street which children can drive their own cars, other part is a hospital, which children can play role of doctors, nurses and patients. The goal of building this kind of park is to educate children and to teach them how confront real situation through a real simulation of a town. As you can see, Parents can play and have fun with children and at the same time teach them even the most serious issues. This way children will like the game, enjoy companion of their parents and learn better.
In addition to educational purpose of game, parents can build a strong relationship with their children by playing fun games and sports. Since children are fond of playing games they love their parents more if parents play with them instead of just focusing on solid schoolwork. Children have precious teachers at school that can help them do their schoolwork. Therefore, if parents do not have much time, they had better play games and do whatever their children like. For instance, my nephew, named Sara, is at the second level of elementary school. Both her parents are working every day and they do not have time to spend time with Sara unless on Fridays. But instead of having good time with Sara on Fridays ,they just insist her to do her homework on her room all the time.
In sum, based on arguments explored above, we can reach the conclusion that parents should spend their time playing games and sports with their children. Not only do game have educational role but also can build a strong relationship.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 226, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...highly important and children can learn better from their parents. Also, it can be sai...
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Line 2, column 1277, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...oy companion of their parents and learn better. In addition to educational purpose o...
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Line 3, column 713, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...of having good time with Sara on Fridays ,they just insist her to do her homework ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80796252927 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38998223709 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451990632319 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7259866701 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7619047619 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384426997767 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142899349862 0.076458572812 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0942170692727 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276778097273 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572614594406 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22 Out of 30
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