Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
The sport has a tremendous impact on our lives and well-being. It enhances our success in immeasurable way because of it encompasses our core. Therefore, I think when the parents are busy and do not have a lot of time with their children, the best use of that time to have fun playing games and sport because the sports effect positively on both kids health and productivity.
First of all, the sports has a profound impact on children achievement. Indeed, escaping from the hectic environment through the sports improve the youth productivity. For example, when the kids are working out, this thing will help them to be more excited to accomplish other related duties such as task-related studying. Moreover, playing games and sports boost kid's knowledge because it helps them to get a fresh mind during playing which in turn increase their knowledge acquisition. Hence, sports and games are the foundation of the youth's prosperity.
Second, working out has a crucial influence on children health. In fact, it helps them to build up their body shape and boost their appearance. For instance, I have a son; he is six years old, I used to push him to work out in his leisure time when I already busy in other commitments, I realized that his body shape became more attractive. In addition, working out encourages the child to get rid of negative fat energy and burning calories, and it helps them to avoid the weight-related disorder because it pushes them to burn more calories through their sports even though they eat more rich food. As you can see, playing games and sports improve kid's welfare.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, it is highly beneficial for children to squander their leisure time in sports. Not only to inspire them, but also to develop their health. Hopefully, all parents follow this strategy and encourage their child to work out to improve the populace.
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in immeasurable way
in an immeasurable way
because of it encompasses our core.
because it encompasses our core. //three should be a noun after 'because of'
because the sports effect positively on both kids health and productivity.
because the sports affect positively on both kids health and productivity.
escaping from the hectic environment through the sports improve the youth productivity.
escaping from the hectic environment through the sports improves the youth productivity.
playing games and sports boost kid's knowledge
playing games and sports boosts kid's knowledge
when I already busy in other commitments
when I am already busy in other commitments
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flaws:
1. No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2 //Read a good grammar book.
2. More compound or complex sentences/clauses wanted. Try not to use pronouns like 'you, I, they...' as the subject of a sentence. look:
For instance,
I have a son;
he is six years old,
I used to push him to work out in his leisure time when
I already busy in other commitments,
I realized that his body shape became more attractive.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 19 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 323 350
No. of Characters: 1540 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.239 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.768 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.55 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.188 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.615 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.51 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.141 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youths'' or 'youth's'?
Suggestion: youths'; youth's
...rts and games are the foundation of the youths prosperity. Second, working out has ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91021671827 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67530598674 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538699690402 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.130785626 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.125 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1875 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9375 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262247089282 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753361099781 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116510264719 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168975867715 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0974830647992 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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