Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Which one do you think is more important for society? Internet access or public transportation. In the contemporary world, with the galloping rate, at which science and technology are flourishing, computers and the internet are being used for many tasks that once were done by humans. Insightfully, answering the question whether it is more important to enhance internet access than to improve public transportation can provoke imminent controversies owing to a variety of factors contributing the formation of a multidimensional viewpoint involving careful analysis. A number of people are in the conviction that public transportation is the most critical feature of each city, as a result of which it should always be at the premium. Their supposition is at odds with some others' from another camp embracing the view that even though public transportation is very important in each city, and lacking excellent public transportation facilities can cause chaos in the society, improving internet access has more priority; in fact, from my vantage point, the latter carries more weight. reasons directing me toward this belief are manifold, but two conspicuous of which are: internet is playing an important role in each society, and public transportation does not need any further improvements, upon which I elaborated the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, one cogent reason corroborating my deduction is that nowadays, the Internet is playing a crucial role in each person's life. people use the internet to find the best and fastest way to work, to find a solution for their daily problems, to learn mathematics, and to socialize. Therefore, we cannot disregard the importance of the Internet in our lives and developments. For instance, I am a computer science student, and my work depends on the computer and the Internet. I use the internet not only to find solutions to my educational problems but also to order food, take a taxi, and so forth. moreover, without having good internet access, computer scientists are not able to implement programs to improve people's qualities of life. Ergo, it can be readily confirmed that having good Internet access is vital for both our daily life and further developments.
Second compelling reason deserving some words here is that almost all the countries have good public transportation facilities and improving public transportation requires a huge amount of money, which is not reasonable to be spent on something that is not necessary. moreover, improving public transportation will not enhance people's lives considerably, and people will not use public transportation more than they are doing so. For instance, I leave in Tehran, Iran, which is one of the most crowded cities around the globe. our public transportation facilities are good enough that people have no difficulties to use subway and busses in their daily transportation. Hence, quality of public transportation is not the reason that some people tend to drive their car every day.
All in all, if the above discussion is contemplated, it can be easily concluded that having excellent internet access is vital for country's development in various aspects, such as public transportation, communication products and so on. Last but not least, it is suggested that governments should teach people how important public transportation is for their environment along with improvement of the Internet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, for instance, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 8.0752688172 409% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2896.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37291280148 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16459093329 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491651205937 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 894.6 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.3920547685 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.904761905 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199518180998 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070830548507 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387859686868 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126629708227 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312950604561 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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