Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?
Standard of living is more and more be improved with the developing of economic and science, technology. However, that is not mean all people have better life. This is a fact that there are many people who can not have a job so they must beg on the street. Some people belives that it is negative activity when they give money to that beggars, but, in my opinion, that activity is the good thing to do.
Most beggars on the street is people who do not have ability to earn money such as elderly, chidren or disable person. Social organization can not afford to care all of them. As a result, they must beg on the street like a way working for live. When we give money to them, although it is just a little, it can be a lot of with them, it can be help them a meal or a clothes. Especially, in developing country, there are so much beggars, society is not enough caring for them, they are not received any support. Due to that fact, they become crimes, thiefs. There is a fact that, crime rate in developing countries is much bigger than developed countries. Essentially, helping beggars is creating better life.
Additionally, helping others make people feel happy. In the modern society, people must face with varieties of issue make they always stress. This is mean, when people give money to beggars, it is a way for them to release stress and continue their pressure life. What’s more, imagingly, you are stepping on the street and see a beggar, if you go the next step without helping them, how do you feel? I think it will be very terrible. Beside that, helping beggar is also a good activity for our children following. Society is condemning insensitivity, but I believes that we have more love than we think. In all, in my perspective, the activity which helps beggars on the street is also helps people feel happy and useful.
In conclusion, giving money to beggars on the street is a nice activity. Some people can say that activity is cheering for the depending and should not continue it. However, it is just a negative views, people always have love to each others and it should be developed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54855643045 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47551786518 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475065616798 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.869891451 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.347826087 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5652173913 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78260869565 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260590728192 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740008326061 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632751978043 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172323618279 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399486004461 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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