Nowadays, the gap of economic inequality is getting higher than before as can be seen from the increasing Gini ratio. We can see in several elite places such as Grand Indonesia and Plaza Indonesia complex, people buy expensive branded things while, on the other hand, some people outside the complex just beg and ask for money. There have been many debates on giving money to beggars is the right thing to do or not.
When we ask the question "does give our money to beggars really substantially help them or not?" the answer depends on where do we want to see the problem, locally or globally.
Everyone's opinions can be different regarding this matter. However, I tend to look at this problem from the big picture and I feel give beggars money is not the right thing to do. Some people might say to put yourself in their shoes. While giving money might help the beggars to some extent, it is not a sustainable effort to solve poverty.
We need to find a sustainable and continuous way to help them. Instead of giving them money, we can give them practical training and short courses and help them to find jobs tailored to their training. For example, we can teach them how to knit and use a knitting machine in order to find jobs in the clothing manufacturer. In this way, they can earn income which is more substantially improve their lives in comparison with 'working' on the streets. Programs like this have been done by several non-profit organizations. What's more important, these organizations provide opportunities for us to become volunteers to help these people. If we have expertise or practical training experience, we can contribute to providing training and help them to find a job.
This kind of program will help people on the street in the long run. By giving them money might make them eat for a day. However, education and skill can give them a better life. Furthermore, this also creates a chain of communities where they can help each other and teach each other. The society is getting more complexed these days and giving beggars money is not going to help them anything but more problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, really, regarding, so, while, for example, i feel, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76486486486 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57447293322 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527027027027 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9467221604 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.15 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244099068193 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817401242316 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842805322349 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172967351122 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770535459649 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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