Some people think attending live performance (of concerts, plays, football games etc.) is better than watching those events on television. Do you agree or disagree with the view? Use specific examples and reasons to explain your answer.

The issue of whether or not people enjoy the same program equally between live performance and a television show is a contentious one. While each has its perks to enjoy and associated hassles to consider, I believe that watching the same program on television is much enjoyable considering its convenience and ready availability. Furthermore, it is the less costlier way as well.

First and foremost, television is better for its conveniences, this is a box inside your living room which can be turned on with a press of a button. Whereas, enjoying the program live means planning of the event, purchasing the tickets finally the arranging transportation to the venue, which altogether may not be a pleasant task to do. Moreover this hassle may quadruple once you are married and you have your own kids with you. After this, managing small kids in such a public place is not a easy task. Which overall may jeopardizes your whole experience. On the other hand you can enjoy the same program sitting on your couch while your kids are playing or enjoying with you, with far less attention required from you.

Furthermore, some of us may argue the experience of enjoying live in a group is better than watching the show alone. But if you carefully consider the group you mostly enjoy with, consists of your near ones. To enjoy altogether you can rather arrange a party at home where your friends will bring up their families and enjoy the whole program in more comfortable way. This way your kids can make new friends whom you know to be good people. This is actually from my own experience when we watched the last football world cup final together at my friends house. After the program we attended dinner had informal gossiping about our life. This is the experience you can have only at your home with level of privacy it provides.

Finally, watching in television can save significant amount of money, which is a concern today,for many people in situations imposed by the treacherous economic condition worldwide. you can save in terms avoiding tickets, transportation and even costly meals in a high street restaurants. This more true when you are in charge of a family. And this costing part becomes more vivid for the popular events, I said above, the world cup final, where the ticket price was so high actually we three friends and our families enjoyed the game at home for just the price of one ticket. this is no doubt a considerable point behind enjoying your favorite shows on television.

Essentially these are the reasons, worldwide a lot many people enjoy live events on television rather than live actually. I believe the convenience, comfortable privacy and affordability are the strong arguments for watching on television.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less costly'?
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Suggestion: Moreover,
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Suggestion: This
... home for just the price of one ticket. this is no doubt a considerable point behind...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'well', 'whereas', 'while', 'no doubt', 'you know', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.219607843137 0.229887763892 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.149019607843 0.158761421928 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.1 0.0866891130778 115% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0627450980392 0.046263068375 136% => OK
Pronouns: 0.078431372549 0.0685040099705 114% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113725490196 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.043137254902 0.0351676179071 123% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.7068006383 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0117647058824 0.0309702414327 38% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00196078431373 0.00188951952338 104% => OK
Determiners: 0.107843137255 0.0887237588012 122% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0235294117647 0.0209618222197 112% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0156862745098 0.0139019557991 113% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2748.0 2387.08602151 115% => OK
No of words: 466.0 408.028673835 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89699570815 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.317596566524 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.255364806867 0.251872472559 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175965665236 0.174417080927 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.109442060086 0.112833075102 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7068006383 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521459227468 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 60.9987411725 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.2608695652 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.586113063 48.84282405 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.47826087 120.699889404 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2608695652 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.652173913043 0.644075263715 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.54480286738 180% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 45.7973502519 45.7405998639 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.2972972973 1.45489161554 89% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328908663824 0.300154397459 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.084895894348 0.103427244359 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.054713819831 0.0752933317313 73% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.467566559613 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.148707794124 0.151897553556 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113506376431 0.114077575197 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592978438922 0.0781384742642 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.356256545712 0.336927656856 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0874199419069 0.067059652881 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219562407081 0.210909579961 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308496923206 0.0618886996521 50% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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