Some teenager take part in different kinds of activities such as musical classes/ sports classes and so on, but others only focus on one activity which is important to them. Which one do you prefer?
In this modern era, there are monumental amounts of classes in which children are able to learn a great many activities such as sports, music, and painting, to name but a few. Personally speaking, I take the view that it is much better teenage take part in different kinds of activities due to some reasons. I will elaborate upon the momentous reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first point worth mentioning would be that should teenagers take several classes instead of one, they would be able to broad their knowledge and experiences, yet not profound. It goes without saying that the further classes teenagers take, the higher knowledge they would gather. I would like to give an example of my own experience to illustrate this. Studying in high school, I took several classes after school time. In compared with those students who just took one particular classes, I could shine in school in a wide range of activities. As an instance, Not only could I gain high marks tanks to language and science classes which I was taking at that time, but also I could shine in school's sport team. One of the repercussion of this event was that I could develop my self confidence by dint of those classes. In a word, students can increase their knowledge by taking a diverse range of classes out of the school.
There is also a more subtle point we should consider. The teen would be able to realize their potential much better by taking several classes instead of one. It is common knowledge that anybody has born with a genetic flair which is sometimes hard to detect. Teenagers who take different kinds of classes have more chance to detect their talents and their gifts. Non of my parents had a gift for music, but tanks to several classes I had taken during high school, my music tutor understood I am so talented in playing piano. In contrast, even though I was interested in painting, my teacher told me " you have too prosaic a mind for painting" so I understood I am not much of a painter. Having known my strength and weakness, I could make the best decision for my future plants and carve a niche for my self in the future.
In the final analysis, according to above-mentioned points, It is my firm conviction that taking several classes is the key to success for teenagers inasmuch as these classes can enrich their knowledge. Besides, while taking different classes, teenagers would be able to realize their potentials much better. Then, why not accept this fact that students would benefit more by taking several classes rather than one.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, then, while, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2124.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76233183857 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57827255978 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504484304933 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2440401357 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.142857143 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2380952381 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287890728177 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849304929382 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630449372031 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193390195615 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531027327621 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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