some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. OTher young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situation do you think is better?

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some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. OTher young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situation do you think is better?

Deciding on where to live is one of the life's more difficult choices. There are so many factors to be considered and each one should be put in the right context. Even though the vast myority of people prefer to live alone, in my opinion is better to delay the independence and live a bit more with our parents. My opinion is supported by economic, psychological reason and for take once in a life time opportunity reason.
Firstly, economic reason. Nowadays, the price of the land and houses is risen at a high rate, hece buying a house is getting harder every day. Whatever your profession is , a good way to save money is to live with your parents, this way there is no rent to pay and the savings will increase!. For example, you could live three years more with your parents and save the money for the upfront payment of the mortage.
Secondly, psychological reason. it is hard to realize when a young adult is prepared for independence, moreover science have found a type of adult which have not reached maturity by the time they leave home, usually they are called "millenials". keeping this train of thinking, if we can stay more time with our parent we can reach maturity mainly from their advices and actions. For instance, my sister left home when she was 38 and she told me that enjoyed my parent advices.
Finally, once in a life time opportunity. Onces people reach independence it is very difficult to return a the initial point. Furthermore, if an independent person return to his parent house it will probably have a lot of troubles in the daily relationship. So, in my opinion people have one opportunity in life to live with their family in a peaceful way, hence we should no waste this opportunity. For instance, some years ago I had some economic issues so I came back to my parent house and It was no the as the first time I lived with them.
In summary, while there are a lot of arguments to get independence, in my opinion spending a few years more with our families has several benefits like more savings, to gain maturity and take the ones in la life chance.

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finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in summary, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56233421751 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72077053657 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525198938992 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5268768303 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5555555556 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9444444444 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228693218447 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060693921751 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528684390859 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112875303666 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534693700702 0.0645574589148 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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