Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Upon embarking on adulthood, many young people are eager to become detached from their parents and live independently. But many would argue this rising tendency, advising the young adults to live with their families for a span of time while they gather the assets that would help them through life, for example an academic degree and a sustainable job. In this regard, the question of what is the best time to live independently for young adults rises a dispute. Although I have many ambivalent thoughts in this concern, I mostly believe youngsters should thrive for independence as soon as it is possible for them. I will briefly elaborate some of my viewpoints concerning this critical topic.
Two major factors that should be concerned in this manner are cultural requisites and personal competence. In many countries, my own country being an example, it is not customary for youngsters to live independently and away from their parents before they are married. In the western countries on the contrary, I believe the exact opposite is more prevalent, meaning that most people move out of their childhood houses upon turning to the appropriate age. So, a significant aspect that should be comprehended upon making the decision to live independently is that is this decision in tune with the prevailing culture of the country we currently inhabit. I would highly disapprove of those who would attempt to go in the different direction of the dominant cultural mores, as it might give rise to contention and misunderstanding.
Another key factor when making this vital decision is how ready the young adult eager to be live independently is. If a youngster is just entering university, without a steady job, is it a good decision for him/her to live independently? I believe living apart from parents at a state in which the child is not completely competent to take on the full content of an independent life can have many detrimental impacts for the young adult. At this stage, the youngster is more prone to making crucially erroneous decision that could have adverse impacts on the future. By and large, I believe adults should not be too hasty to set free from their parents. They should wait for a time when they are capable of pursuing an independent life.
All aforementioned statements apart, I believe independence is very critical for people. If youngsters stay under their parents’ supervision for too long a period of time, they might lose the motivation that would thrive them for an independent life and become lazy. I believe this state of life could also give rise to many disputes between children and parents. This is mainly because the children are at an age in which they want to experience life themselves and make their critical decisions on their own, but parents might intervene in their private life, giving rise to a contentious state. To restate, although I believe children should not be too hasty to live independently, living for a prolonged course of time under the roof of their parents could also have adverse impacts. It could result in lost motivation, mounted laziness and perpetual disputes between parents and their loved ones.
To sum up, independence is a major issue young adults contemplate as they thrive through adulthood. Many factors should be taken under account by blossoming adults when making the decision to live apart from their parents, personal competence being one of the greatest. Nevertheless, children should definitely be encouraged to lead an independent life as soon as possible and parents should thrive to provide the means for them, since a dependent lifestyle is never the key to a prosperous future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: EAGER_TO[1]
Message: With 'eager to', use the base form of the verb: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...ulthood, many young people are eager to become detached from their parents and live in...
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Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...arents' supervision for too long a period of time, they might lose the motivation that wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, if, nevertheless, so, while, apart from, for example, by and large, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3071.0 1977.66487455 155% => OK
No of words: 609.0 407.700716846 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04269293924 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96768813016 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84454311825 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449917898194 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 972.9 618.680645161 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3173559713 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.84 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.36 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.56 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275694192209 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930110135677 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643418980262 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183071826092 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612277931651 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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