students have more influence from friends than teachers

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students have more influence from friends than teachers

Since the dawn of humanity, human beings has been bestowed with an irreplaceable gift: communication. Until going to school, parents play a vital role in children, but after that friends and teachers also influence them too. With this in mind, some people believe than it stands to reason that "students are more influenced by their teachers than their friends", while others hold the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the latter attitude carries more weight based on quite a few reasons, three substantial of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The most compelling reason is that students only meet their teachers when they are in classroom, which is the time that is mostly about academic courses. On the other hand, they spend most of their time with their friends. For instance, students go and back to school with their friends and play games with each other. Accordingly, it is crystal clear that students spend a great amount of their time with their friends rather than their teacher; hence friends enjoy a pivotal role in each other.
Another reason as to why I don not concur with the first perspective in the introductory paragraph lies in the fact that students build their characteristics by mixing with their friends. They chance their behaviors in order to be accepted as one of the members of group that they like to attend it. As a point in view, my sister was shy, she was constantly afraid of talking with people. However, when she attended to school, and made new friends, her personally completely changed due to the fact that her new friends were highly active and sociable, and as result as she was hanging with them more, she became an energetic and sociable girl like them.
Last but not the least reason is that friends understand themselves the most since they continually have similar interest and tastes in common. Students talk about their problems which are has to do with their study like mathematic problems, but they would rather talk about their personal problems like their problems with their family members and their relationships with their boy-friends or their girl-friends with their friends rather than their teachers since they do not often feel comfortable with their teachers. Although teachers are more experienced, they can rarely perceive what is in students’ mind in a proper manner; therefore, they cannot efficiently consult them. It is statistically proven that students prefer to talk about their troubles with their friends and take advice from them because they think that their friends understand them.
In summary, having considered all the aforementioned ingredients discussed above, I do support my point of view than students are most influenced by their friends rather than their teachers on the grounds that friends spend numerous time with each other and understand each other better.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 193, Rule ID: CHANCE_CHANGE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'change'?
Suggestion: change
...tics by mixing with their friends. They chance their behaviors in order to be accepted...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a proper manner" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...rely perceive what is in students’ mind in a proper manner; therefore, they cannot efficiently con...
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'as to', 'for instance', 'in summary', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.196116504854 0.229887763892 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.147572815534 0.158761421928 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0912621359223 0.0866891130778 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0660194174757 0.046263068375 143% => OK
Pronouns: 0.116504854369 0.0685040099705 170% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.159223300971 0.118717715034 134% => OK
Participles: 0.031067961165 0.0351676179071 88% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.57600071429 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0194174757282 0.0309702414327 63% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0601941747573 0.0887237588012 68% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00582524271845 0.0209618222197 28% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0174757281553 0.0139019557991 126% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2859.0 2387.08602151 120% => OK
No of words: 471.0 408.028673835 115% => OK
Chars per words: 6.07006369427 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.333333333333 0.338922669872 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.250530785563 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.180467091295 0.174417080927 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0976645435244 0.112833075102 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57600071429 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492569002123 0.524397521467 94% => OK
Word variations: 56.518505551 59.2087087015 95% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 27.7058823529 20.5533526081 135% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.0564885142 48.84282405 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.176470588 120.699889404 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7058823529 20.5533526081 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.823529411765 0.644075263715 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 52.7589609092 45.7405998639 115% => OK
Elegance: 1.17058823529 1.45489161554 80% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214880394611 0.300154397459 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122707791734 0.103427244359 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0603100890653 0.0752933317313 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.555020322908 0.497263757937 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.183663219485 0.151897553556 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867377787497 0.114077575197 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629651371061 0.0781384742642 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.33505627572 0.336927656856 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00873271628957 0.067059652881 13% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152155616789 0.210909579961 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522998330548 0.0618886996521 85% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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