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Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well

Within the recent years, our society has witnessed and experienced radical changes in each and every aspect of our lives. Nevertheless, the controversy over whether or not successful people try new things than only doing what they know how to do well, still remains debated. Personally however, I believe that people who have achieved in life, mainly focus on what they are good at. I feel this way mainly because of two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

In the first place, it is an undeniable fact that modern society is becoming more and more competitive as time passes by. Consequently, people nowadays, are required to equip themselves with in-depth and professional knowledge in order to succeed. My own experience is a compelling example of this. After I graduated from university, I took some additional marketing courses to acquire more detailed information about this area of study. This enabled me not only to get a high position in a renowned company from the first day at work, but it also allowed me to get promoted more rapidly than those employees that had a broader experience. In other words, successful people are conscious about the fact that only professional knowledge and experiences can lead you to further success. Thus, they do not waste their time on taking risks by trying things and instead concentrate only on what they do well.

In the second place, it is my point of view that taking risks does not always guarantee people the chance to succeed. Instead, it can result only in a waste of enormous effort and time that a person has invested on a new thing. To illustrate this point, I will give my friend as an example. My friend Maya, has been exploring new adventures and possibilities in the international market since 2005. To be more precise, she has owned a coffee shop, a restaurant, a shopping mall, and a pet store. However, none of them have resulted in an achivement, and consequently, she is now experiencing severe financial difficulties. Had she only concentrated in one business, she would have probably been able to succeed and get high revenues each year. Stated differently, trying new things could have negative influences on a person.

To conclude, although it is true that taking risks and acquiring broad experiences can be beneficial for one's daily life, I believe that successful people focus on doing the activities that they excel at. Therefore, based on the arguments presented above, I definitely disagree with the statement that successful people try new things and take risks rather than doing what they know how to do well.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ves. Nevertheless, the controversy over whether or not successful people try new things than o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, still, therefore, thus, well, i feel, in other words, it is true, in the first place, in the second place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2176.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94545454545 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79327705289 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543181818182 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.290129622 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.619047619 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9523809524 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61904761905 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.492818876497 0.236089414692 209% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128815246864 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.201367364564 0.0737576698707 273% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.330574253067 0.150856017488 219% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.17179588828 0.0645574589148 266% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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