Tidy students who organized their room are more successful than other students
Nowadays, we witness many kinds of students. Some students are tidy while others have untidy life. Most People believe that tidy students are more successful in comparison with other graders. From my point of view, students who have tidy life will achieve success in their lives because they can get the best scores and they would be popular between their classmates as well. My arguments for these points are explained as follows.
First, tidy pupils have more concentration on their lessons because they have clear room undoubtedly. In other words, they can focus on their units in the best way. Actually, their clear room does not distract their concentration. For example, if they have extra things such as lots of magazine, they will not be able to keep their homework from their schools and their photocopy of their homework may merge with those magazines so they cannot find their assignment thus they are will not be able to devote time to do them. As a result, tidy students who have clear room are capable to obtain the best results in their educational environment. In addition, tidy graders can access to their books readily since they put their books in the proper shelves therefore they can find special books that they need in their shelves. Hence, it is clear that they can access to the some materials that they need in order to prepare their selves for their exams in the school. Consequently, they can obtain the notable scores.
Second, tidy students have better reputation among their classmates because most students prefer to have a tidy friend therefore tidy students can have great deal of friends in their school. Furthermore, tidy people at school may obtain a lot of awards from their teachers since most instructors like tidy persons. On the other hand, teachers give awards to the tidy students so as to encourage other graders to become tidy persons. That is why tidy graders would have lots of fans in their schools.
All in all, from what I have discussed, these days, we can see different students in all over the world. Some graders have tidy life but others may be dirty. In this way, some people think that tidy pupils are more successful than other students. In my opinion, tidy graders, would be successful in their lives since not only can they attain great scores but also they are able to have a striking popularity in their school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun magazine seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of magazines'.
Suggestion: lots of magazines
...mple, if they have extra things such as lots of magazine, they will not be able to keep their ho...
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Line 3, column 872, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...it is clear that they can access to the some materials that they need in order to pr...
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Line 5, column 377, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...achers give awards to the tidy students so as to encourage other graders to become tidy ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8337408313 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32849884074 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444987775061 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7702935156 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1428571429 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4761904762 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 5.45110844103 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389235370617 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145679461047 0.076458572812 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999223771876 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28839930728 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528917818814 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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