TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

Without a question, some people would argue that sports and social activities are not necessary, and furthermore, they are distractions from the academic studies while others may consider the opposite point of view. As far as I am concerned, I firmly agree with the second group. An individual is a whole, mind and body, and for sure a social being. In my own experience, I could hardly complete successfully my university degree without both, sport and social activities. I would detail my reasons below.

To begin with, it's important to understand that an individual is a whole, mind, and body, immersed in a social structure. According to this, universities and colleges need to understand that education is not a simple assimilation of data by the students, but an integral and multidisciplinary activity that involves the academic community of each institution.

By the same token, we can confirm the important role of sports during study periods of time. Not only, the practice of sports has evident health benefits, but also, according to recent research, during physical activities the brain eliminates endorphins, a hormone, family of the dopamine, that has a relaxing effect on the mind and the body. For this reason, to practice some sport allows to relief part of the stress consequence of tight schedules and difficult exams.

Finally, as mention above, we are part of a social system. Furthermore, we depend on that social system to function successfully as individuals. In my own experience, having friends and good classmates during my time in the university, helped me on many levels, not only for the evident benefit of their company, but also because they were a great support with different projects, helpful explaining concepts I didn't understand during the classes, and by recommending me the better classes or programs to follow according to their own experiences. In other words, social activities would promote a better contact with the academic community, getting to know good friends and classmate that would help and improve our learning.

In summary, for all the argument explained above, I strongly believe that sports and social activities are essential for a successful experience in universities and college. This is because they improve and promote confidence, relieve stress and help to cope with the difficulties academic studies could demand.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 258, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...similation of data by the students, but a integral and multidisciplinary activity...
^
Line 6, column 258, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ities the brain eliminates endorphinas, an hormone, family of the dopaminas, that ...
^^
Line 6, column 397, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'relieving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: relieving
...s reason, to practice some sport allows to relieve part of the stress consequence of tight...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 412, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...projects, helpful explaining concepts I didnt understand during the classes, and by r...
^^^^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...would help and improve our learning. In summary, for all the argument explained...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, may, second, so, while, in summary, to begin with, by the same token

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26822916667 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92002109003 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536458333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.3138261368 48.9658058833 186% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.4375 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147114903826 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485950608243 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0228413336429 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0823825577927 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158958591347 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.