TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

our world today become very open, because of the improvement in technology, which lead many people attached and addicted to many less important things in the world, moreover, people ignored what is important and vital. yes I agree that people doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. I will explain why people doing that in the following essay.

to begin with, addiction to technology is a disaster. people nowadays are attached to their cell phones, I pads and computers more than any thing else. people in the past used to talk to each others, visit each others and being nicely connected to each others. however, this days people begin to admire to their devices more than any thing else, for example our youth generation should be lovely connected to the elderly parent. in the past children used to went to their parents home weekly to visit them and to take care of them. however this days, new generations become satisfied just by calling their parent once weekly or even text them. that due to the effect of technology on them. people have no time now. people prefer to stay home playing and enjoying their new and easy life. that's why I consider improvement in technology is a big problem that prohibit people from doing something they should do and let them doing
things they like to do .

second,

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...em doing things they like to do . second,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, second, so, for example, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1110.0 1977.66487455 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 234.0 407.700716846 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74358974359 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25884910423 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568376068376 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 339.3 618.680645161 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1971881626 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3846153846 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.69230769231 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 27.0 5.5376344086 488% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385030422978 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131779291891 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.194420367372 0.0737576698707 264% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.392278013748 0.150856017488 260% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149757139478 0.0645574589148 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 86.8835125448 43% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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