Tpo 10
It has long been a hot controversy among contemporary researchers that of the two options of depriving kids from video games or letting them enjoy video games which one is more preferable. Answering to this question is imperative as it deals with the lifestyle of the next generation of our societies. Video games seems to be a non-stop phenomenon in the new era. As far as I am concerned, if the parents merely try to neglect this phenomenon without considering the consequences of their act, it would be catastrophic. When it comes to me, I think video games are not waste of time.
The first plain reason for my propensity is that some video games are designed to teach. This category of game is actually beneficial to kids. The kids can experience some situations that they cannot do in real life. For instance, a game by the name of 'volcano' is about a boy who has a magic car that can go into the earth and explore the unknown different layers of earth. At each level of this game, the player should remember core elements of each layer such as iron, cobalt and etc. to pass that level. Clearly, Tutoring games can also be very informative in social sciences. A reputable game company in my country recently published a video game designed to boost the self-confidence when the players should act as the presidents of countries and choose the right commands based on the information they know about countries. Hence, the more you know about a country the more likely you will win the game. Due to a simple video game, youngsters are being encouraged to learn facts about their world.
The second reason that I should mention is that video games can sharpen the minds of children dramatically. According to a research which was conducted by one of the best universities in the United State, playing video game for children between the ages of five and ten can increase the ability of multi-tasking by forty percent and reducing the chances of getting brain cancer by thirty percent. Thus, parents should even encourage their children to play video games.
The last but not the least, parents can take advantage of video games as a prizing tool for the kids to obey them. A prime example from my own experience may shed some light on this point, I remember when I was in primary school my mother told me that she will buy me a play station and let me play with it if I do all of my homework and help her washing the dishes. By helping my mom and doing my homework every day, I hoped to play with my console. At first, my father was adversary to this way of rewarding but shortly after seeing my great grades in school, he admired my mom’s approach on using video game as a tool to persuade me to be a better person in home and school.
To conclude, considering the above reasons, not only video games are just a hobby, but also a way to sharpen the minds of our kids, letting them experience things safely and raise them better. Like all other new phenomena such as Internet and social applications which can be two edged swords, video games also needs to be used wisely. Parents should wisely let their children to play video games for a limited time and to buy the games assigned to the age of their children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 478, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ents of each layer such as iron, cobalt and etc. to pass that level. Clearly, Tutoring g...
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Line 4, column 348, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to wash' or 'wash'.
Suggestion: to wash; wash
...if I do all of my homework and help her washing the dishes. By helping my mom and doing...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, thus, for instance, i think, such as, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2645.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 581.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55249569707 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90957651803 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52850417304 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500860585198 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 835.2 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.1467309423 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.8 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.24 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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