TPO 14
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
From long years ago. human being needed to travel a lot. From next city to other hemisphare, from the southpole to the northpole. In additon to provide cloth, spicy, drugs, and other merchants, it is also abvious people enjoy to travel. In fact one of the most important entertainment always is traveling. Some of my friends have a deep bias on traveling inside their country, but I think traveling to foreign countries have more benefits.
The most important reason is that by traveling to other countries we can easily and more important directly expericne other cultures. Of course due to advanced technology such as internet and sattelite T.V channes we can learn a lot of thins from other countries and their cultures. But the problem is that these technologies unfortunately always could give us limited information. For example, before traveling to India, I saw in the Indian movies Indian women are wearing traditional dress called "surry" ant I was thinking we can not find modern dress there. But after traveling to India, I saw a lot of women who were wearing modern dress like other women and we found some shops that we could buy excelent but suitable price modern dress.In addition sometimes we could easialy be cheated by wrong information or maybe the information be very old. I remmember before traveling to Pakistna, I had read some articles about the women education of that country. According to those articles, just a few women form plotical family are educated.But after going to Pakistan, I found out the despite that articles, a lot of women are edudated. Some of them even were professor universities. These expereice taught me by traveling abroad, we can be directely expose to other cultures.
All in all, although some of my friends prefer to enjoy traveling to some fantistic cities in my country, but I really prefer to travel abraod and going to other countries. It help me to be directly expose to other cultuers. I am sure if my friends go to other contires they will agree with my opinion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Human
From long years ago. human being needed to travel a lot. From next...
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...one of the most important entertainment always is traveling. Some of my friends have a de...
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...nology such as internet and sattelite T.V channes we can learn a lot of thins fro...
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... technologies unfortunately always could give us limited information. For example...
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Suggestion: In
...xcelent but suitable price modern dress.In addition sometimes we could easialy be ...
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...lent but suitable price modern dress.In addition sometimes we could easialy be cheated b...
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Suggestion: But
...women form plotical family are educated.But after going to Pakistan, I found out th...
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Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
...abraod and going to other countries. It help me to be directly expose to other cultu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, for example, i think, in addition, in fact, of course, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90724637681 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77766166529 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539130434783 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5398001428 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0555555556 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17893240394 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623162962842 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504084235758 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140750140292 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740873430486 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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