TPO 15
Nowadays, the goverments have many problems in their society but one of the noticable problems is about the economic. In other words, financial problem is momentous issue for the goverments to manage it. Controling this problem never happens if family members that are the basic part of the society don't realize how to do that and thus children are so important part in this case. As far as I am concerned, i agree that children should learn to manage their money at young age because of several reasons including having enough experience to become financially responsible adults and realizing the value of money.
Having substantial experience is the first reason of current discussion. In this regard, it should be noted that if we want to be skilled in any issue, we need to have enough practice or experience about that issue. In other words, for children, managing money at young age not only help them to have enough money at that time but also it is a good experience that causes them to be skilled about managing money in the future. For instance, my brother worked at coffe shop when he was child. He earned 700$ every month and he always saved 200$ of it, because my father was told him to save a little of your income every month. Now, that experience helps him in his financial problems. It means when he need extra money in his work, he uses the money of incomes that he is saving every month. Therefore, by learning how to manage the money to the children at their young ages, we give them a good experience in their life.
Realizing the importance of money is another noteworthy reason that I agree with above statement. In this case, learning how to manage the money at young age to the children has profound effect on them. In other words, Parents may put on emphasize on children to manage their own money in order to help them to realize the point which money is valuable. On the other hand, imagine a child that give money from the parents whenever he want with no saving of it. The child never realize the value of money. So, he will continue this method in the future of his life. when he achive money from different ways, he won't save it and may spend it quickly beacuse he did not realize the status of money when he was child. Hence, children should learn to manage their own money in order to realize the value of it.
Having good practice and understanding the status of money are two reasons of learning to the children how managing their own money. It sounds logical to say that by learning the issue that we discussd aboved the financial problems would be decreased in our society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 300, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... that are the basic part of the society dont realize how to do that and thus childre...
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Line 1, column 408, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...in this case. As far as I am concerned, i agree that children should learn to man...
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Line 3, column 503, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$700'.
Suggestion: $700
...coffe shop when he was child. He earned 700$ every month and he always saved 200$ of...
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Line 3, column 540, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$200'.
Suggestion: $200
...ed 700$ every month and he always saved 200$ of it, because my father was told him t...
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Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...give money from the parents whenever he want with no saving of it. The child never r...
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Line 5, column 566, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
... this method in the future of his life. when he achive money from different ways, he...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57659574468 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34669276928 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421276595745 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0595938348 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7727272727 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3636363636 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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