TPO 21
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that the dawn of civilization, the job has played a prevailing role in every individuals' life. Perhaps the most controversial part of this issue is success in job. The inevitable question has invariably engendered heated debated among academicians is whether the ability to communicate well to others is more important in success in a future job or studying hard in school be in higher priority. Therefore, a plethora of people are the leading proponents of the former. Whereas others hold exact opposite perspective and believed that studying more significant than the ability to relate well to people. I am, contrary to both conventions, inclined toward the oponion that communication isn't in a higher important or viceversa; both of them is needed for attaining success in future job. To substantiate my point of view; the following paragraph will aptly elucidate a cursory glance at the outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that other humans have a great influence in bodies' life especially in jobs. Had a person communicate with others in the best way, he would readily prevail his idea in any works. In my oponion, the way of interaction with people is a crucial tool for attracting other attention to yourself. Take a personal experience as an example; when I was a student in school, rarely had I go to store alone. One day, I went to a shop-center with my best friend. We are faced with a women in this center, she is so friendly and have a high talent in communication and interaction with others. Her attribute had impact on us that led to our shopping from this center; nevertheless this quality wasn't so good.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that secrete of the success is refered to communication beside the enough knowledge. These two factor are so important that a person change all life easily. When a person has an adequate sience in corresponding field and can use this information with an appropriate interaction, a great number of success bombarded him. This person such a complete person that any company is hired readily with an enormous salary. The noteworthy research statistic, revealed by a recent social research conducted in our city shows that more people have knowledge and communication, more sense of satisfaction and overcoming a challenge is created. The amount of success in these people is higher than another people in my city.
To recapitulate, all the aforementioned reasons converge the point that the talent to relate well to people shouldn't be aim for all society with higher priority than other issues like studying hard in schools or universities. Both of theme is required in jobs. However, that was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are some other reasons and examples, challenging the claim, which are not mentioned above. Finally, it is suggested that a survey is conducted to find out whether people have experienced valuable results by more pay attention to the communication and gathering knowledge in job or not.
Time: 49 min
Words: 537
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...in job or not. Time: 49 min Words: 537
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2572.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0431372549 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97769227557 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 822.6 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2498904976 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.88 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258929461208 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616503531747 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062853535605 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160588541447 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0765648035123 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.