Teachers are the most influential person among the students specially the young students. So when the teachers make their social or political views known by students in the classroom, this has negatively affect on the students. Because of some of them are so young to understand what happened around them.
First, the teacher has there points of views on some political or social. And these views should not tell the student about them because sometimes they are wrong. Moreover, this will produce wrong opinions of the mind of the students especially those students in the elementary school.
Furthermore,the teacher should not allow discussing the political situations because the politicals may be using teachers to vote for them, and encourage students and their families to take one side of the political party than others.
Moreover, when some of some the teachers are holding a wrong social vision, for example, last year my son had a teacher who is pushing my son to do illegal things and my son listen to him, and he was doing these things because of his teacher asked him to do that.
As a conclusion, the teachers must not allow them to discuss any political or social views with the students to prevent any further affect on their student in an improper way. And student's family should be aware of the opinions of their teachers.
Essay evaluation report
Because of some of them are so young to understand what happened around them.
Because some of them are so young to understand what happened around them. //check Google about the difference between 'because' and 'because of'
Sentence: Furthermore,the teacher should not allow discussing the political situations because the politicals may be using teachers to vote for them, and encourage students and their families to take one side of the political party than others.
Error: politicals Suggestion: political
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flaws:
No. of Words: 229 350 //Minimum 250 words wanted. the arguments are too short.
How to put more content? Try this pattern:
Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree. (suppose we support side A)
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3: Second, reason 2, blabla... do the same thing as First
Para 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. first,....second...However, there is no causation/relation... Still I support side A, ...first,....second...
Para 5: Conclusion.
An simple example (Eating at home or restaurant) for paragraph 2:
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence: Eating at home can save money) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences: I can prepare cheaper food from food market; I don't need to drive or take a bus to reach the restaurant; I don't need to pay tips...) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentence: for example, a sandwich can cost me $10 at restaurant, but it only cost me $5 at home.) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences: with the money I saved, I can buy a good book to read; I can use the money for a trip...).
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 17 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 229 350
No. of Characters: 1091 1500
No. of Different Words: 118 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.89 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.764 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.424 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 78 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 59 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.581 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.42 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.71 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.193 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'affected'.
Suggestion: affected
...s in the classroom, this has negatively affect on the students. Because of some of the...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...s in the classroom, this has negatively affect on the students. Because of some of them a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... has negatively affect on the students. Because of some of them are so young to underst...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 12, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...s in the elementary school. Furthermore,the teacher should not allow discussing the...
^^^^
Line 4, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...chers are holding a wrong social vision, for example, last year my son had a teac...
^^
Line 4, column 265, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se of his teacher asked him to do that. As a conclusion, the teachers must not a...
^^^
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...ith the students to prevent any further affect on their student in an improper way. And s...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 157, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an improper way" with adverb for "improper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ent any further affect on their student in an improper way. And students family should be aware of...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 248, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ware of the opinions of their teachers.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, may, moreover, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1122.0 1977.66487455 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 228.0 407.700716846 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92105263158 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54093903727 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 212.727598566 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 337.5 618.680645161 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.2788804975 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.2 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259993085894 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119810664964 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756691590572 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155358158672 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395386411082 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 86.8835125448 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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