TPO-23 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Work is the essential part of our life, and every one has to be work. So, do you work in a slowly and correctly manner is also necessary even thought today life moves faster than ever before because of?
First, our success depends on that work if you correctly did that. However, people face much more stress than in the past, but they have to be more careful when they work. For example, Microsoft company has more than one worker do his job, and anyone has to do their responsibility for his work if one of them did the job quickly and made mistakes. And all things are looking great from the outside. But the problem occurs after one of the users like bank employee, for example, use the company’s product, a huge amount of error happens because of one of the workers of the company did his job in a high-speed way with less precise. Besides, the company will lose their costumers.
Second, the imitation is the most critical part especially for the kids around you. For example, I have thee kids and each time I was cocking or cleaning my house in high speed even not accurate and a lot of mistakes occur. But only I need to complete my task before they wake up or return from outside. In fact, I realize that my kids are trying to imitate me and they do whatever I want but not in the right habit. They want to finish their homework or any other things. So, after that, I attempt to do anything in perfect shape to let my kids copy me but in an exact manner.
As a conclusion, the more important to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct for success and copy you in the great path.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
than ever before because of?
than ever before ? //can't put 'because of ' at the end of a sentence.
a huge amount of error happens because of one of the workers of the company did his job in a high-speed way with less precise.
a huge amount of error happens because one of the workers of the company did his job in a high-speed way with less precise. //you always have this issue about 'because of' and 'because'
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flaws:
No. of Words: 302 350
No. of Different Words: 162 200
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 302 350
No. of Characters: 1264 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.169 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.185 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.137 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 74 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 54 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 24 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.5 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 75, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...work if you correctly did that. However, people face much more stress than in the...
^^
Line 2, column 600, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a high-speed way" with adverb for "high-speed"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... the workers of the company did his job in a high-speed way with less precise. Besides, the company...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding kids'?
Suggestion: the surrounding kids
...s the most critical part especially for the kids around you. For example, I have thee kids and each...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 559, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an exact manner" with adverb for "exact"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...erfect shape to let my kids copy me but in an exact manner. As a conclusion, the more important t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...success and copy you in the great path.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, as to, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1309.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.33443708609 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27450666156 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549668874172 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4334104428 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2666666667 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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