TPO 27
Without any shadow of doubt, choosing and commencing a job is an inevitable juncture in the life of most people, since in today's modern world, a sample life is not possible. Different people may select various procedures to find their ideal jobs according to their personality, age, skills, traditions, to name but a few. With this in mind, some believe that it stands to reason that an individual is required to take a job right away, when he or she has a chance to get it, while others hold the opposite view--that is--waiting to find a proper job. I, personally, subscribe to the latter attitude based on quite a few reasons, three of the most substantial of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The most compelling reason is that even though one can earn money, which is essential in today's world, it adversely affects one's financial situation in the future. One choosing a job, which he or she is not interested in it, rarely progress, which usually leads to lower income. Moreover, these people constantly encounter with their bosses' dissatisfaction, which sometimes may cause firing. In this regard, there is a Persian proverb, the equivalent of which may sound like, "The loss of what has been gained with no effort is probable", which indicates the importance of finding an appropriate occupation.
Another interpretation as to why I do not concur with the first perspective in the introductory paragraph lies in the fact that not being interested to a job, may affect every aspect of people's lives in a negative manner. It seems to me that it not only affects people in workplace, but also it may affect their personal life. I clarify my point of view with a real story which happened to me: two years ago, I worked in company as a selling expert, even though I had a proper income, I did not like my work, which had made me so anxious. Thus, I decided to abandon my job and find a job that I really like it.
Last but not least, in spite of the fact it is true that some people stay that taking a job cannot inhibit people from finding another job, it does not work in the real world owing to the fact that getting used to everything is inherent in mankind, which avoids them to pursue their dreams. Therefore, they may become reluctant to find a good job, thanks to either their lack of need to work, or being accustomed to their jobs, that can be too monotonous.
In summary, having considered all the aforementioned arguments discussed above, I firmly endorse my point of view that the merits of finding an idea job outweigh those of taking a secured job on the grounds that it prevents individuals from seeking their dreams which brings them about boring life, and being prosperous. Additionally, it may endangers people’s mental health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 201, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative manner" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ay affect every aspect of peoples lives in a negative manner. It seems to me that it not only affect...
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Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t may endangers people’s mental health.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'as to', 'in summary', 'in spite of', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.18281535649 0.229887763892 80% => OK
Verbs: 0.168190127971 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0749542961609 0.0866891130778 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0585009140768 0.046263068375 126% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0786106032907 0.0685040099705 115% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115173674589 0.118717715034 97% => OK
Participles: 0.054844606947 0.0351676179071 156% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69215950152 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0383912248629 0.0309702414327 124% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0950639853748 0.0887237588012 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.018281535649 0.0209618222197 87% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0292504570384 0.0139019557991 210% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2759.0 2387.08602151 116% => OK
No of words: 483.0 408.028673835 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71221532091 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.327122153209 0.338922669872 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.219461697723 0.251872472559 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.146997929607 0.174417080927 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.111801242236 0.112833075102 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69215950152 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546583850932 0.524397521467 104% => OK
Word variations: 66.2677071601 59.2087087015 112% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 30.1875 20.5533526081 147% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8359680883 48.84282405 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.4375 120.699889404 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1875 20.5533526081 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.9375 0.644075263715 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 52.1336697723 45.7405998639 114% => OK
Elegance: 1.15568862275 1.45489161554 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108024879291 0.103427244359 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0529000301265 0.0752933317313 70% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.55219790108 0.497263757937 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170233394087 0.151897553556 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.369055795264 0.336927656856 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0682602154274 0.067059652881 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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