TPO-31: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At all times, there has been the known controversy that are people happier and more satisfied now compared to the past? And in every era, there have been the grandparents who would tell stories of the better days in the past, when people were more compassionate, loving and all round happier, causing the younger generation to wish they could live in those golden days. But this controversy has reached its peak in the present age. More and more people are left unsatisfied in the modern days of technology and overwhelming information, when compared to the past. I think there many different aspects of today’s age which has led to this universal sense of unhappiness, some of which are described shortly below.
The era we live in is the time of ever changing technologies, fashion styles and intriguing, yet unnecessary products. All this has led to a greedy materialistic demand in people, especially the younger generation. Today’s highest price cell phones and laptops are tomorrow’s outdates toys. This month’s most lavish textiles and clothing are out of fashion in a blink of an eye. All this changing fashions and developing technologies, constantly underscored through the media, has left the consumers with a constant feel of dissatisfaction with their current belonging. Thus, the average working man/woman must put in extra hours to meet the materialistic demands he/she faces, cutting from the hours intended for rest and vacation. This growing feel of wanting has deprived the people of these modern days of the sense of fulfilment and happiness.
Another reason for higher displeasure in people of the present can be related to the high amount of information, mainly bad news, being spread throughout the world via new broadcasts and social networks. Today’s people are more involved with every small happening that takes place in near or far parts of our world. Being exposed to such high amount of information, especially devastating news of death, war and terrorism, can lead to anxiety and despair in many people. One might find it difficult to live in joy and appreciation when there is a child endangered by war many miles away. All these horrid news swirling around a person’s mind can cause fear and depression, adding to an ever growing sense of dissatisfaction.
Although some might argue that this sense of displeasure with the era one lives in is a universal characteristic of people of all times, I believe living in the days of growing materialistic needs, developing technologies and constant exposure to dreadful news from all parts of the world has led to people of our time to be less happy and satisfied with life as it is.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, thus, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2252.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0835214447 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97510421698 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528216704289 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.4364662084 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.111111111 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6111111111 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.44444444444 5.45110844103 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17277039462 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487438010644 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571755612093 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114776895564 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527773869765 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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