tpo 33 - writing 2

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tpo 33 - writing 2

Educational methods have been changed dramatically over the time. The most impressive alter among all other changes is the way of doing homework. At first students was to work on their project just by owns while today working in a group is remarkably encouraged. I do believe the idea of group working is more effective on students learning because they not only get challenged but also learn other abilities like social interactivities.

To begin with, although some students can have more concentration on their project when they are doing it alone, they must not miss other rewards(gains) of working in group just because of more focus since the advantages of being a member of a group outweigh the disadvantages. Trying to do a specific duty or solve a problem in a group have lots of benefits which there is no better way to gain them. New way of thinking which leads to learning of how consider other aspects of a problem is the most vital thing that one can learns among group. Facing with the new and usual ideas causes one’s creativity to get broaden. Recent studies shows that students who were asked to do their homework together had better performance on solving new problems rather than those that never worked in group.

In addition to the reason mentioned above, the improvement in some personal skills of working with others is of the most and best achievement of group working. By doing that, one can learn how to interact in a group, to persuade others, to respect opposite opinions, to deal with different personalities which leads to know about different ways of interacting with peoples. These abilities help them to be more prepared for entering bigger societies such as work environments. I can admit that all of my group discussion I had during my education in university came in handy when I start to work as a marketing manager in a big and prestigious company. Not only did I have to convince my manager and owners of company about effectiveness of an idea, but also I had to explain the idea in such a great way in that our customer agreed with and i could not do this without the skill of negotiating that I had learned before.

To put it briefly, By working in a group, one can get some great advantages which would be absolutely essential and useful for the rest of his life, so do not underestimate the power of work in a group.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 525, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'learn'
Suggestion: learn
...em is the most vital thing that one can learns among group. Facing with the new and us...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 843, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ay in that our customer agreed with and i could not do this without the skill of ...
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Line 8, column 92, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'essential'.
Suggestion: essential
...et some great advantages which would be absolutely essential and useful for the rest of his life, so...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, if, so, while, as to, in addition, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70023980815 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73064312002 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520383693046 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.5979765381 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.666666667 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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