TPO 35- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Celebrities are usually surrounded by sheer numbers of interviewers and their fans. It seems like they will never have the opportunity to enjoy a normal, private life. But is it not what they desired in the first step? Do they deserve to have more privacy? There are compelling ideas on both sides of the argument. I personally subscribe to the view that the privacy they have is just enough.

To begin with, I believe that altruism does not exist; whatever a person does or achieves during his lifespan - be it acquiring highest level of education, getting a decent job as a celebrity, or even helping the poor - is due to some kind of self-interest since the most kind-hearted deeds are done at least to give a person a sense of inner happiness. Accordingly, I am of the opinion that athletes and entertainers, in addition to bringing honor and happiness to society, have the propensity to become famous. This is what they wanted in the first step and they need to get on with it when they achieve it.

Moreover, celebrities' lives are sources of inspiration for many. Having read entertainers' and athletes' life stories and seeing the hardships they have gone through, their fans will become motivated to lead a successful life despite all its difficulties. For example, Charlie Chaplin - the renowned comedian, had a harsh lifestyle, but always pretended to be happy. A letter he had written to his beloved daughter that was disclosed later gives us an insight of how deep a person he had been, even though he was always playing funny and superficial roles in movies. This example illustrates that we will benefit from knowing celebrities lives. Were we deprived of this important document, we would never know how a dejected person can be successful in bringing happiness to thousands of houses.

However, there is another side to the debate. As humans, we all have the right to have privacy. Sometimes we need some moments of privacy for ourselves without any distraction, or we do not want anyone to be informed of our most secret relationships. Nevertheless, I believe that if one really seeks for privacy, he can ensure it in numerous ways. For instance, it is highly unlikely for peoples' privacy to be intruded when one is at his house.

Having considered all the above arguments, I believed that famous people should not be given privacy since they do not want it and many people benefit from reading about the celebrities lives.

Votes
Average: 9.5 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'acquiring the highest'.
Suggestion: acquiring the highest
...or achieves during his lifespan - be it acquiring highest level of education, getting a decent jo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87529976019 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77050692415 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563549160671 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.7444818333 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8095238095 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95238095238 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200161107422 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691547088806 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940996174066 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120576281392 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542779058761 0.0645574589148 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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