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There is no doubt that nowadays, parents encourage their school aged children by giving them prizes such as money. No one can deny the influence of giving support by parents. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this statement is that, is it a good idea that parents offer money to their children for getting high grades at school?
From my perspective, it is not good at all and it has many disadvantages. To substantiate my case, the following paragraphs represents conspicuous reasons to elaborate my preference.
One of the reasons coming to my mind is that, this idea will spoil children. Recent researches by psychologists show that spoiling children can make them unuseful for society and they always have problem in dealing with their problems. These kind of children always rely on their parents assistance therefore, when it comes to face to difficulties in their future lives, they will find it sophisticated. For instance, Albert Einstein, a well known scientist, was not spoiled by his mother at all. He mentioned in his biography that his mother was always telling him that you have to get high scores only for your prosperity.
Moreover, children should raise their self-confidence to become successful in their future jobs and personal lives. But by doing this idea they could not be. When parents do these kind of activities, they make their children’s personality weak and breakable. For example, when children grow in this way, they learn to expect everyone to give them prizes by doing their tasks and when this does not happen in his work place, they will break inside. Therefore, they will be annoyed by their bosses or supervisors.
Finally, most of children do not know what should they do with huge amount of money they are given and some of them spend it in a bad way. For instance, some school students buy drugs from their friends at school. In fact, high school students tend to do dangerous thing because mainly they enjoy experience excitement like this. So, parents can give them other kinds of prizes instead of money such as books. Therefore, they can extend their knowledge indifferent fields like history,art and science.
Overall, taking into account all these factors, I strongly believe that this is not high-minded thought that parents should give their children money when they take high grades. Encouraging children by money not only is beneficial for them but also makes them inefficient.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...problem in dealing with their problems. These kind of children always rely on their parent...
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...idea they could not be. When parents do these kind of activities, they make their children...
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
...heir bosses or supervisors. Finally, most of children do not know what should they do with hu...
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Line 9, column 126, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...hey are given and some of them spend it in a bad way. For instance, some school students buy...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , art
...nowledge indifferent fields like history,art and science. Overall, taking into ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in fact, kind of, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07843137255 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71513319915 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536764705882 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0298470276 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1818181818 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5454545455 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363692483849 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110217172085 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719265959136 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190128722078 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0885214753268 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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