TPO 42 task 1
In this hectic era, one of the pressing issues is how to choose a university major. Opinion are divided weather to study a major in which significant job growth or study a major in which they are interested. Personally speaking, I strongly assert that students should be encouraged to study fields in which significant job growth due to some reasons. I will elaborate upon the momentous reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first point worth mentioning would be that having job equals money which is key to high-quality life style. Needless to say that no money, no honey; not only cannot an unemployed afford his basic needs, but also he is not able to enjoy his life. A prime example of my own experience may shade some light of this point. When I was in high-school, my friend and I had been interested in art and we liked to study in an art university in the future. After consulting with her parents, she changed her minds and she told me it is hard to make a living by art, but I decided to study field in which I was interested. She is a computer engineer now. She has so high-quality a lifestyle. She has traveled in several famous countries in these recent years. Even, she has bought a house recently. In contrast, I am not able to afford my basic need and I have always financial problems. In a word, the more job opportunities for students, the higher quality lifestyle in the future.
There is also a more subtle point we must consider. Should people find a job, they would be able to spend time and money on their favorite subjects. It is my firm conviction that anybody should do a degree in a field which will provide job opportunities for them in the future. By dint of a high-prestigious job they would be able to spend money for learning their favorite subjects. To exemplify, as I said in the above paragraph, my friend was interested in art works, but she decided to become an engineer because job opportunities for these majors are exponentially growing. Having monumental amount of money, she has enough money to take private classes for learning her favorite subjects such as painting, music, and pottery making, to name but a few. Hence, after finding a job, human being would have enough money for spending on their favorite subjects.
In the final analyze, I take the view that the most important things for choosing a university major is its potential for providing job opportunities in the future since job equals too high-quality a lifestyle. Besides, people would be able to learn their favorite subjects if they have a job in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 685, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...w. She has so high-quality a lifestyle. She has traveled in several famous countrie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, may, so, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67032967033 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75566711411 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487912087912 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3415485828 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5416666667 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9583333333 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.79166666667 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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