TPO-47-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Todays, we have a lot of instruments to get information from everywhere like internet, television and newspaper that they mention the events happening around the world. While most people think that it would be better for them not hear anything about the event, personally I believe that knowing the events not only good but also necessary to know. The reasons for my opinion are manifold, among which influence and making money are the most paramount ones.
First, I think that the events happening around the world can influence our life in that time or future, however we ignore it. There is an Iranian proverb which says this soap is for you, however you want it or not. Thus, we should going to prepare ourselfs for any reaction in this situation. As an example, the war which occur in Iraq affect all of the world. Terrorists are a big problem for the world. So we should prepare ourselves and know how we can recognize them. For this reason, I believe that it is importatn know about the events.
Additionally, some information and events can be a good opportunity to make money. As a personal experiment, last year when Russia and turkey cut their economic relation make a good opportunity for the other country to business with Russia. If anybody have the knowledge that Turkey support chicken required of Russia and also know the cut, he/she understood it would be an opportunity to sell chicken to Russia and make money. On the whole, I think it can have benefit to know about event happening around the world.
As a conclusion, Personally I believe that it is necessary and important to know about events for reasons including preparing ourselfs and finding opportunities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, thus, while, i think, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1404.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85813148789 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60773422236 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532871972318 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8177064269 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2666666667 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183836461477 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701775286496 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527910593428 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121478301069 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167276501167 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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