At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
For many students, the most ambitious wish is to enter a prestigious university. They hope to enhance their knowledge to be prepared to enter the career world in their future. In this way, universities should carefully undertake the responsibility to provide the required amendments at the best form to approach this goal. Among different opinions toward the financial resources, I would strongly believe that social activities and sports should gain a share, not essentially equal, compared to educational affairs.
To my experience, newcomers to universities are severely shocked by cultural differences. The spiritless and only educational-oriented environment may intensify this shock. I clearly remember that one thing relieved the shock was social interactions through student clubs. I find many friends from different departments, helped me to get familiar with new environment. They show me how to hire an apartment, get familiar with shopping centers, entertainment centers and so on. The same condition occurred during my presence in the sport clubs.
It is true that finding good friends in that difficult condition is the most important outcome of sport and social clubs, many other advantages can be uncovered through deep investigation of the issue. Specially, sport clubs are the best places to exercise your body. I am used to do exercise at least one hour per day. I am off the opinion that it is very important for my mental health and makes me cheerful. I addition, the physical health perspective should be considered. Without sport and having a flexible and strength body I would get a verity of diseases in the near future.
Last but not least, my presence in the social and sport clubs somehow helps me to increase my educational efficiency. I have read an article in a newspaper that recent research have been revealed that the students who spend a couple of hours per week in social interactions or sport activities have much better performance in comparison with those leave these activities. Therefore, the role of these activities in positively lead my education is undeniable.
To sum it up, I would strongly believe that universities should consider social and sport activities as important as improving educational environment, and investing more financial resources on this way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to doing'.
Suggestion: used to doing
...best places to exercise your body. I am used to do exercise at least one hour per day. I a...
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Line 3, column 412, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...my mental health and makes me cheerful. I addition, the physical health perspecti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, therefore, at least, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29619565217 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10345479292 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576086956522 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9743225988 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.45 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.45 5.45110844103 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228022491065 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598469988434 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640313866245 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139879546476 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693807734418 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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