At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Do you agree or disagree?
It goes without saying that in such a sophisticated world where the technology growing so fast, universities playing an important role in the societies. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that the most important function of colleges and universities is based on education activities and they should receive more financial support rather than sports and social activities while others look at this concept through a different lens. From my vantage point, sports and social activities should be regarded as one of the universities’ top priorities and should receive equal financial support as classes and libraries. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the main purpose of attempting university is to increase students’ knowledge and prepare them for their future life. Classes and libraries are critical to improve students’ knowledge, but social activities are essential for preparing students for their future life. Social activities learn students how to improve their self-confidence, work as a member of a team work, make friends, interact with other people. For example, I can recall when I was attempting NU University around seven years ago, I always try to participate in social groups and clubs. One of my favorite club, that I attended, was “Become creative”. In this club, every week one of the members presented recent invention in his/her field and tried to illustrated it as simple as he/she can. Thorough this meetings, I became familiar with many different fields and also made a lot of friends.
Although the aforementioned reasons are the first ones which cross the mind at first glance, they are by no means the only reason available. Actually, there is another subtle point which must be borne in mind that the health benefits of regular exercise and physical activity are hard to ignore. Everyone benefits from exercise, regardless of age, sex or physical ability. Everyone knows that regular exercise is good for the body. But exercise is also one of the most efficient ways to improve your mental health. Regular exercise can have a profoundly positive impact on depression, anxiety and more. It also relieves stress, improve memory, helps you sleep better, and boost overall mood. According to a recent empirical study conducted by the School of Psychology of Yale University reveal that students, who exercise regularly, feel more energetic throughout the day, sleep better at night, have sharper memories, and feel more relaxed and positive about themselves and their lives.
To make a long story short, I do not think it is a good idea to devote more money on classes and libraries rather than sports and social activities. Taking all the aforementioned into account, it can be concluded that sports and social activities are as important as educational activities. Therefore, I highly suggest that universities and colleges should devote equal financial support for classes, libraries, sport and social activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, look, so, therefore, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2594.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34845360825 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93133230943 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546391752577 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 820.8 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8781993745 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.909090909 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0454545455 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22727272727 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297228362216 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737769463412 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.099874811512 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198840886876 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137390658522 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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