At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
The universities and colleges these days are thinking of giving a worthy financial support for sports and social activities since they believe that those activities are as essential as classes and libraries. I totally advocate this idea because of these rational reasons.
To begin with, students nowadays pay attention to their health in addition to their studies. In the modern world, students figure out that they will not achieve their studies goals just as good as they anticipate if they do not do exercises. Furthermore, pupils take care of their physical appearance as well, so they will work out in order to become more attractive in everyone’s eyes and to be more self-confident. For example, my sister used to suffer from body dimorphic disorder as she cannot find an appropriate approach to lose weight. However, things change when her school opens a gym; it was when she truly started working out and recovered from her obesity.
Secondly, students should open their net-working while they are attending colleges through social activities. It is not sufficient enough for you to just focus on learning without widening your relationships. Recruiters appreciate employees who have social skills such as communicating skills, working in groups skills rather than working individually. Moreover, taking part in social activities makes it easier for you to receive a letter of introduction from your professor which is a great plus point if you want to apply for an internship. For instance, my brother is a third-year student who is about to become a trainee, and the introductory letter from his professor lets him be accepted easier than his peers.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that universities and colleges should invest money in sports and social activities in order to aid their students to enlarge the students’ net-working and to get healthier which make them to become the best version of themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 264, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... become the best version of themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24115755627 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89640833677 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594855305466 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4773267468 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.384615385 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9230769231 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9230769231 5.45110844103 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179382138599 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605409673571 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922664969471 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135388534613 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0914634340399 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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