We should never ever give up.
Never never give up means to keep trying and never stop working for your goal. I think it is good advice for all of us. It is not to say you have to success in achieving your dream. It says you will not regret in the future. If you like playing basketball, and you are too short, this does not mean you won't be capable of being a successful basketball player one day. Also, if you could not pass the TOEFl exam, it does not mean you can not speak the English language. And, if you do not have money, it does not mean you will not be rich one day. Following is a brief explanation of my point of view.
First of all, each sport needs specific characteristics in its team players. For many, they need especial tall, and strong, healthy body. Otherwise, the players are not helpful. However, in some cases, we can find odd players, but they are the best in their teams. For example, the famous basketball player; Micheal Jourdan was very short to enroll and play his favorite sport. He was 1.6 cm. But, this did not stop him. He did not give up his dream. Till finally, found the team that gave him the opportunity of playing; Chicago Palace, he led his team to won six Golden awards. This short guy proved to the world that we should not give up our dream.
Second, I can not tell the pain of retaking the Toefl exam more than twenty times till now. Even though I live in the USA more than three years, I work and have many American friends. But, I can not get the higher score. The score that helps me to change my life globally. The score that if I get it, I will be a pharmacist. I am now working as a pharmacy technician. My salary $9 per hour, while if I break this exam, my wage will be raised up to $40 per hour. It is painful to repeat this exam over and over. But, I will never give up. Success is with consistency.
Least but not the last, do not have money does not mean you are poor. I know money helps people to enjoy their lives. Everyone dreams to travel the world and work fewer hours per day. Unfortunately, life is hard. However, there are several examples of people who became famous and rich own their own. They made their dream real. They did not give up. For example, Bill Gate, he imagined creating a computer that is affordable and available for everyone. He did not give up, he searched, and traveled a lot, till he found the companies that helped him to invest his project. Now, he became a millionaire. Other example, people who purchase the lotto, they never give up, and in many cases, there are several families who won and their lives changed forever.
In conclusion, we should not give up our dream. The pain of the failure will turn to triumph and immense happiness when we reach our goal. There is no role or exceptions for our dreams. Whether we are not qualified for a particular sport, or could not pass the Toefl exam, or we, do not have money or famous. We should never give up.
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Essay evaluation report
you have to success in achieving your dream
you have to succeed in achieving your dreams
flaws:
1. Avg. Sentence Length: 12.591 21.0 //the sentences are too short. More compound or complex sentences/clauses wanted.
2. No. of Words: 554 350 //Don't need to put reasons in the introduction
3. Need a topic sentence for one paragraph, this is not a topic sentence:
'Second, I can not tell the pain of retaking the Toefl exam more than twenty times till now.'
it is more like an example.
You can apply reasons like 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' to all writing/speaking topics.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 44 15
No. of Words: 554 350
No. of Characters: 2272 1500
No. of Different Words: 255 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.852 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.101 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.097 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.591 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.383 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.432 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.225 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.393 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.169 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: Never
Never never give up means to keep trying and never ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Never' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
Never never give up means to keep trying and ...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 280, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aying basketball, and you are too short, this does not mean you wont be capable o...
^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...brief explanation of my point of view. First of all, each sport needs specific ...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that we should not give up our dream. Second, I can not tell the pain of retak...
^^
Line 3, column 380, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...king as a pharmacy technician. My salary per hour, while if I break this exam, my...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'while', 'for example', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'first of all', 'in many cases', 'in some cases']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.175 0.229887763892 76% => OK
Verbs: 0.18125 0.158761421928 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.065625 0.0866891130778 76% => OK
Adverbs: 0.075 0.046263068375 162% => OK
Pronouns: 0.1140625 0.0685040099705 167% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0703125 0.118717715034 59% => OK
Participles: 0.0203125 0.0351676179071 58% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.21156924288 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0203125 0.0309702414327 66% => OK
Particles: 0.0140625 0.00188951952338 744% => OK
Determiners: 0.0609375 0.0887237588012 69% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0234375 0.0209618222197 112% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0125 0.0139019557991 90% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2918.0 2387.08602151 122% => OK
No of words: 552.0 408.028673835 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28623188406 5.86048508987 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.48200974243 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.226449275362 0.338922669872 67% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.148550724638 0.251872472559 59% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0978260869565 0.174417080927 56% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0489130434783 0.112833075102 43% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.21156924288 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481884057971 0.524397521467 92% => OK
Word variations: 57.6993034039 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 44.0 20.6684587814 213% => Less sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 12.5454545455 20.5533526081 61% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9019509152 48.84282405 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.3181818182 120.699889404 55% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.5454545455 20.5533526081 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.340909090909 0.644075263715 53% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 27.4005270092 45.7405998639 60% => OK
Elegance: 0.717299578059 1.45489161554 49% => Essaays need to be developed more elegantly.
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172806580843 0.300154397459 58% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.104964360201 0.103427244359 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.104098738768 0.0752933317313 138% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.356041154752 0.497263757937 72% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.138745557818 0.151897553556 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690566576316 0.114077575197 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157331365961 0.0781384742642 201% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.243379294325 0.336927656856 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0071370506758 0.067059652881 11% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131983254282 0.210909579961 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0916466212431 0.0618886996521 148% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 11.8870967742 210% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.91756272401 285% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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