What changes you would do in your school and why?
School plays an important part in one’s life. It indicates the spheres of our interest and forms the idea of our future career. Knowledge that we get there is the knowledge we use entering the university so it is really important for the school to give its students as much useful skills and knowledge as possible. If I could implement an important change in a school I attended, I would equip classes with computers and projectors for several reasons.
First, modern technologies would make educational process more efficient. In fact, the most difficult thing for a school teacher is to capture and keep pupils attention, so it is necessary to differentiate the educational process. For instance, five years ago, preparing to apply to the university I visited history courses. The professor gave us lots of information that we could not memorize quickly. Moreover, all the dates and names mixed together in my head and I felt like I knew no history of Russia at all. To stop our confusion professor brought his lap top, connected it to the local projector, and started showing us presentations to illustrate his lectures. Surprisingly, all the dates became chronological and all the names formed a clear lineage in my head. I felt I was well prepared for university exams. As you can see, equipping each class with a computer and projector would be a great way to make the lectures easier to understand and memorize.
Second, working with a computer and projector in class will give children useful experience. In other words, since nowadays computer and computer-related technologies are deeply integrated to our everyday life, it seems reasonable to get children used to them as early as possible. For example, my cousin Alex attended a well-equipped school where they used computers and other devices for studying while I attended a usual school and did not get that kind of experience. Then we entered the same university. During our first year we had to do many researches and one of the excellent mark guarantees was preparing a presentation illustrating the results of your research. There is no surprise that I was not getting high grades until Alex spent the whole weekend teaching me the basics of working with a computer and using it for the research results presentation. After it I got only excellent marks for my projects. All of that taught me that if I had had a chance to get used to working with computers and projectors at school, I would have shown much better performance at the university.
To sum up, if I had a chance to change something in the school I attended, I would equip classes with computers and projectors to differentiate the educational process and make children used to modern technologies. The earlier children will get this experience, the easier school-to-work transition will become.
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Suggestion:
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'if', 'moreover', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'kind of', 'in other words', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230326295585 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.165067178503 0.158761421928 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0863723608445 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0326295585413 0.046263068375 71% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0921305182342 0.0685040099705 134% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.10556621881 0.118717715034 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0364683301344 0.0351676179071 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.99967422054 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0383877159309 0.0309702414327 124% => OK
Particles: 0.00191938579655 0.00188951952338 102% => OK
Determiners: 0.0882917466411 0.0887237588012 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.021113243762 0.0209618222197 101% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00191938579655 0.0139019557991 14% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2842.0 2387.08602151 119% => OK
No of words: 475.0 408.028673835 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.98315789474 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.353684210526 0.338922669872 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.282105263158 0.251872472559 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.221052631579 0.174417080927 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.162105263158 0.112833075102 144% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99967422054 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498947368421 0.524397521467 95% => OK
Word variations: 57.6635127516 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.652173913 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3559931384 48.84282405 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.565217391 120.699889404 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.652173913 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.652173913043 0.644075263715 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 48.8627002288 45.7405998639 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.28476821192 1.45489161554 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179841875063 0.300154397459 60% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0883626142477 0.103427244359 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0936425631508 0.0752933317313 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.431633516509 0.497263757937 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.168513543551 0.151897553556 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665019488557 0.114077575197 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504757705291 0.0781384742642 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.413423601873 0.336927656856 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0424177855747 0.067059652881 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134788354818 0.210909579961 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0102326464752 0.0618886996521 17% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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