Which opinion do you agree with? Some people say that the Internet provides us with a lot of valuable information. Others believe that too much information on the net causes many problems.
During the information revolution in the 20th century, people created one of the greatest inventions, the Internet. With the help of the Internet, modern people could have a high-efficient routine life and productive work. However, now some people claim that too much information form the Internet brings us many problems while other people think that the information provided by the Internet is valuable and significant. In my opinion, I do also believe that information online is valuable and vital.
Through the information on the Internet, people could use this to have access to more choices and make a better decision. The information has been always been a vital role in the decision-making process of the human. With the help of the Internet, people will take more time to make a good decision. For example, I could save money by information from comparing items in different online shops. Last year, I want to buy a coat. Instead of going shopping outside for the whole day, I used the Alibaba and Tao Bao web at home. I could see more coats in different online shops and save more money with large discounts than the shopping mall. Also, I didn't need to walk all buy and it saved my time. Therefore, the information online has help people a lot in the decision-making process.
Additionally, the information online has promoted us to communicate with each other no matter the geographic and language barriers even the time limit. Using social networking applications which have connected people all around the world with the flows of the information through the Internet. For instance, I could make pen-pals all over the world. I have had 2 pen pals from 2014 till now. I'm in China and they are in the US and the UK. Even we are in different countries and between a large time difference, we still could exchange our opinions and thoughts through the e-mails. Moreover, when Facebook has become a hit, I could chat with each other every day when we were online. In this case, the information on the Internet provides people bridge to communicate and understand with each other.
In summary the information in the Internet enables people to make a better choose and close the distance and promote the communication between each other. And taking every aspect in to fall consideration, the Internet provides people valuable information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
... people claim that too much information form the Internet brings us many problems wh...
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Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has always been
...make a better decision. The information has been always been a vital role in the decision-makin...
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Line 3, column 648, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...scounts than the shopping mall. Also, I didnt need to walk all buy and it saved my ti...
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Line 5, column 393, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...have had 2 pen pals from 2014 till now. Im in China and they are in the US and the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in summary, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95949367089 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81227651821 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498734177215 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.370759591 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1739130435 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1739130435 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78260869565 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335787434729 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955236216919 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889294114603 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227494743368 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101423347782 0.0645574589148 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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