Which opinion do you agree with? Some people say that the Internet provides us with a lot of valuable information. Others believe that too much information on the net causes many problems.
During the information revolution in the 20th century, people created one of the greatest inventions, the Internet. With the help of the Internet, modern people could have a high-efficient routine life and productive work. However now some people claim that too much information form the Internet bring us many problems while other people think that the information provided by the Internet is valuable and significant. In my opinion, I do also believe that the information online is valuable and vital.
Through the information in the Internet, people could use this to have access more choices and make a better decision. The information has been always been a viral role in the decision-making process of human. With our the help of internet, people will take more time to make a good decision. For example, I could save money by the information from comparing items in different online shops. Once I want to buy a coat. Instead of going shopping outside for the whole day, I used the Alibaba and Tao Bao web at home. I could see more coats in different online shops and save more money with large discounts than the shopping mall. Also I didn't need to walk all buy and it saved my time. Therefore, the information online has help people a lot in the decision-making process.
Additionally, the information online has promoted us to communicate with each other no matter the geographic and language barriers even the time limit. Using the social networking applications which have connect people all around the world with the flows of the information through the Internet. For instance, I could make pen pal all over the world. I have had 2 pen pals from 2014 till now. I'm in China and they are from the US and the UK. Even we are in different country and between a large time difference we still could exchange our opinions and thoughts through the e-mails. Also when the Facebook has became the hit, I could chat with each other every day when we were online. In this case, the information on the Internet provides people briages to communicate and understand with each other.
In summary the information in the Internet enables people to make a better choose and close the distance and promote the communication between each other.And taking every aspects in to fall consideration, the Internet provide people valuable information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
... people claim that too much information form the Internet bring us many problems whi...
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has always been
...make a better decision. The information has been always been a viral role in the decision-makin...
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Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...paring items in different online shops. Once I want to buy a coat. Instead of going ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...large discounts than the shopping mall. Also I didnt need to walk all buy and it sav...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...iscounts than the shopping mall. Also I didnt need to walk all buy and it saved my ti...
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Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'connected'.
Suggestion: connected
...cial networking applications which have connect people all around the world with the fl...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...have had 2 pen pals from 2014 till now. Im in China and they are from the US and t...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...nions and thoughts through the e-mails. Also when the Facebook has became the hit, I...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...the e-mails. Also when the Facebook has became the hit, I could chat with each other e...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in summary, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92171717172 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78014018 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494949494949 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4707795341 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5909090909 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33205888953 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945427873098 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0912306407216 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225540015828 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1018946774 0.0645574589148 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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