You have been told that dormitory rooms at your university must be shared by two students. Would you rather have the university assign a student to share a room with you, or would you rather choose your own roommate? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer
Through all stages of our lives, from our childhood to our adulthood, there are a lot of people whom we have interaction with, such as our parents, our teachers, our classmates, and our roommates at dormitories. Among all these people, our classmates and our roommates at university, have a deep influence on our lives. Although some people hold this idea that universities should be responsible to assign roommates to students, other believe that students should be given the chance to choose their own's . It is a controversial issues with pros and cons; however, I firmly believe that students should be allowed to choose their own roommates because of two important reasons.
The first point which should be taken into consideration is that, by choosing our own roommate, we would be able to enjoy our time better. You could choose someone whom you have a lot in common with, and in this fishion, you would be able to get along well with him/her. You can participate activities that you are both interested in, and, as a result enjoy your time. For example, I had a roommate at TMU University, while I was pursuing my studies as an undergraduate student, whom me had a lot in common . We both had a burning desire to climb mountains and camping in nature. Once we went to one of the mountains, located at north of Tehran, and stayed for three days. We were fascinated by the nature in daytime and enthusiast about the beauty of the sky at nights. We really got a lot of enjoyment at that time. In brief, allowing students to choose their roommate, will add a great deal of enjoyment to student's life.
The second point is that, in this fashion, students will gain more knowledge. Students can choose one of their knowledgeable classmates to live with in dorm, as a result they can help each other in their studies. They can work in groups to complete their projects and learn a lot because of this interaction. For instance, while I was studying Mechanical Engineering at Yasooj University, I had a roommate who was also majoring in that field. I can remember that we formed a group to perform a teamwork to accomplish an assignment in CFD course. He had an in-depth knowledge of fluid mechanics and I had a dramatic capability to write computer programs. We cooperated with each other and prepared an exhaustive report for that class. In this way I learned a lot about fluid mechanics and my roommate gained skill to work with computer. In sum, cooperation with roommates can benefit students in many ways such as gaining more knowledge.
As we have seen, if students are allowed to choose their own roommates, they can gain more skill as well as more knowledge, and they would be able to enjoy themselves. I recommend every university to allow their students to choose their roommates.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, really, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in brief, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2314.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76131687243 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7586808091 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477366255144 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5032240714 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4166666667 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221178383569 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635401203472 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696750715765 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135955884612 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629737991787 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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