You have been told that dormitory rooms at your university must be shared by two students. Would you rather have the university assign a student to share a room with you, or would you rather choose your own roommate? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer
Through all stages of our lives, from our childhood to our adulthood, there are a lot of people whom we have interaction with, such as our parents, our teachers, our classmates, and our roommates at dormitories. Among all these people, our classmates and our roommates at university, have a deep influence on our lives. Although some people hold this idea that universities should be responsible to assign roommates to students, other believe that students should be given the chance to choose their own. It is a controversial issues with pros and cons; however, I firmly believe that students should be allowed to choose their own roommates because of two important reasons.
The first point which should be taken into consideration is that, by choosing our own roommate, we would be able to enjoy our time better. First, an individual could choose someone whom she have a lot in common with, and in this fashion, the person would be able to get along well with him/her. You can participate activities that you are both interested in, and, as a result enjoy your time. For example, I had a roommate at TMU University, while I was pursuing my studies as an undergraduate student. Both students had a lot in common. We both had a burning desire to climb mountains and camping in nature. Once we went to one of the mountains, located at north of Tehran, and stayed for three days. In addition, We were fascinated by the nature in daytime and enthusiasted about the beauty of the sky at nights. We really got a lot of enjoyment at that time. In brief, allowing students to choose their roommate, will add a great deal of enjoyment to student's life. Students don’t have any money. If it wasn’t because of that, It wouldn’t do best. I do not like this car. This view is horrible. I feel tired this morning. I am not looking forward to the concert. He is my enemy.
The second point is that, in this fashion, students will gain more knowledge. Students can choose one of their knowledgeable classmates to live with in dorm, as a result they can help each other in their studies. Moreover, students can work in groups to complete their projects and learn a lot because of this interaction. For instance, while I was studying Mechanical Engineering at Yasooj University, I had a roommate who was also majoring in that field. Myself, can remember that we formed a group to perform a teamwork to accomplish an assignment in CFD course. He had an in-depth knowledge of fluid mechanics and I had a dramatic capability to write computer programs. We cooperated with each other and prepared an exhaustive report for that class. Because of this, I learned a lot about fluid mechanics and my roommate gained skill to work with computer. In sum, cooperation with roommates can benefit students in many ways such as gaining more knowledge.
As we have seen, if students are allowed to choose their own roommates, they can gain more skill as well as more knowledge, and they would be able to enjoy themselves. I recommend every university to allow their students to choose their roommates.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 528, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'issue'?
Suggestion: issue
...choose their own. It is a controversial issues with pros and cons; however, I firmly b...
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Line 2, column 190, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...ndividual could choose someone whom she have a lot in common with, and in this fashi...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, moreover, really, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in brief, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2557.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 534.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78838951311 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78827883663 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48127340824 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.9 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.7246225319 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.90625 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6875 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34375 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194076161652 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460403426958 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476626465869 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120539661126 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378611538715 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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