You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is one thing you will do to improve the community?
You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is one thing you will do to improve the community?
Upon the question what is one thing you will do to improve the community, different people have different opinions based on their educations, feelings, background. Frankly, if I want to spend several hours improving my community, I will definitely clean up our public places like parks. In addition, planting new trees and flowers is another thing that will improve my hometown. In the following paragraphs, I will try to explain my position more clearly.
First of all, I live in a small town near Tehran and we do not have enough entertainment centers like cinema or park. Besides, our only park has a lot of garbage and it is not appropriate for families and children. I think cleaning up the park from trash is a great idea because more people will go there and do useful activities such as exercise. Undoubtedly, exercise has countless positive influences on people’s overall health. So that if we have a clean and beautiful park, we will have healthy citizens.
In the second place, growing new trees will improve the quality of air. These days, my home town suffers from air pollution and planting trees can solve this problem partially because trees absorb carbon dioxide and produce oxygen. In addition, growing beautiful flowers is another thing I want to do.
Last but not least, people can go to the park with their friends or relatives, watching flowers, playing with their pets and so forth. Furthermore, they can meet new people, make friends and discuss about various issues with them in the park. In my opinion, these activities make people feel happy and it has significant effects on their minds.
Taking all the aforementioned arguments into account, it can be concluded that cleaning the park and growing plants are noble things to do for improvement of my community based on the reasons which I outlined above.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, frankly, furthermore, if, second, so, another thing, i think, in addition, such as, first of all, in my opinion, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63671836513 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552941176471 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8294784289 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5555555556 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385512028224 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137977109572 0.076458572812 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.223261897698 0.0737576698707 303% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255531711703 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.342837975656 0.0645574589148 531% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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