Your government has announced that it wishes to build a social house near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community.
My community is the most important thing in our lives. We have spent most of our childhood in this area. If a social house were to be built near my community, it would have both advantages and disadvantages. Following paragraphs discuss both advantages and disadvantages each.
To talk about the advantages, one would be growing the name of the community and helping the helpless. To elaborate, building a social house would be a good cause for the elderlies or orphans. It would always do good to other human being. For example, there was this old people’s home that was built for all the elderlies near my aunt’s place. It not only was a place for older people to stay but also had an amazing and beautiful garden and walking area. So the people from around the area would come to this place with their grand children in the evening to take a walk. The sight in itself was so blissful. Whenever I used to visit, I could see the happiness floating around in that space. The staff was also very supportive and caring. As a result, people actually wanted to visit and stay in this place. This place was also mentioned in many of the articles and magazines. I am pretty sure the people of that community were proud of this establishment. As you can see, this social cause really helped other human beings and made them happy.
As of disadvantages, my community is not very developed. Building a new factory would be more preferable choice in this scenario. New factory will not only create more jobs for the people staying in my area but also make government the money through taxes. For example, I read in a newspaper a few months back that how this town in northern part of India went from underdeveloped to developed in just a matter of months. This was a result of new government that was elected during the assembly elections. They built 3 new factories in the area. This resulted in creation of more jobs. The taxes collected from the businesses were used for development of the town. New roads, hospitals, schools were built. The people who were once unemployed and unhappy now are living a beautiful lifestyle. Thus, this example makes me believe that same can be replicated in our community. The money government is willing to spend on the social house can be spent on generating jobs and developing the town. Once, that is achieved it can use the surplus amount for the social cause.
In all, there are both positive and negative sides to the situation. One would be for a good cause and yield results in short time, other would be beneficial for the whole community and would take a longer period to show positive returns. I believe the government will be wise to make the right decision.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, really, so, thus, for example, in short, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2240.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6764091858 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6013380591 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484342379958 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6287518205 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.8787878788 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5151515152 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146406423352 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412567882385 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460726733717 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986441231769 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619882240773 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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