Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals. Altruism is the opposite of selfishness; individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing for themselves. Examples of altruism abound, both among humans and among other mammals. Unselfish acts among humans range from the sharing of food with strangers to the donation of body organs to family members, and even to strangers. Such acts are altruistic in that they benefit another, yet provide little reward to the one performing the act. In fact, many species of animals appear willing to sacrifice food, or even their life, to assist other members of their group. The meerkat, which is a mammal that dwells in burrows in grassland areas of Africa, is often cited as an example. In groups of meerkats, an individual acts as a sentinel, standing guard and looking out for predators while the others hunt for food or eat food they have obtained. If the sentinel meerkat sees a predator such as a hawk approaching the group, it gives an alarm cry alerting the other meerkats to run and seek shelter. By standing guard, the sentinel meerkat gains nothing—it goes without food while the others eat, and it places itself in grave danger. After it issues an alarm, it has to flee alone, which might make it more at risk to a predator, since animals in groups are often able to work together to fend off a predator. So the altruistic sentinel behavior helps ensure the survival of other members of the meerkat’s group.
The author tries to establish a point of view that the benevolent nature of animals as well as humans encourage to perform activities to help others that might not necessarily be advantageous for themselves. Surprisingly, the lecturer seems to be quite at odds with him/ her. By refuting the example of Meercat as well as humans provided by the essayist, the speaker justifies her claim saying that these supposedly called "self-less" activities are not all self less.
As the author tries to substantiate his/ her first argument with the example of Meerat, a mammal that stays guard on an empty stomach who waits for safety of its group and warns its friends against the predator durign its food hunt, the speaker dismisses each of these behaviors as altrusitic. According to her, the recent study of these animals discovered that the not only did those animals in guard eat first before their group, but they were also the first to flee if they were to ever sense danger as well as the act of calling out could cause others to gather rogether, imposing more danger. Consequently, the orator shows how these sentinels are not truly self less animals.
Moving further, the lecturer also brings light into some of the loopholes of the wirter's explanations on the acts of humans. As the author tries to justify the action of kindness such as donations of organs by people to their closed ones as well as strangers, the speaker tries to shift the attention to other direction. She mentions how this is motivated by a person's desire for praise, feeling of self worth and other non materialistic rewards. As a result, even the humans are selfish beings.
It is in this manner that the orator repudiates each of the points made by the essayist about both the Meerat mammals as well as humans. Consequently, she justifies how everyone is driven by self interest and no one is anything such as altruistic.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 113, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'performing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: performing
... of animals as well as humans encourage to perform activities to help others that might no...
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Line 3, column 669, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun animals is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... how these sentinels are not truly self less animals. Moving further, the lecturer...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Line 7, column 119, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
... essayist about both the Meerat mammals as well as humans. Consequently, she justifies how...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, so, well, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 327.0 270.72406181 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87155963303 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7311008748 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 145.348785872 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562691131498 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.579232006 49.2860985944 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.75 110.228320801 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 21.698381199 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06452816374 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131125199983 0.272083759551 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394536154086 0.0996497079465 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459510430087 0.0662205650399 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0689786355772 0.162205337803 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501137740703 0.0443174109184 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.3589403974 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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