Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people think that keeping the connection with the old friends is more importance than making new friends. The issue is a controversial one, but in my opinion, a closer examination reveals that it's more crucial to expand the network with new people for several reasons. In this essay, I will explain my position providing examples to support my claims.
First of all, the more people we know, the more benefits we get. Each individuals has various kinds of knowledge and resource. For example, the doctors know well in the hospitality, but may not expert in art. Normally, people cannot perfectly do anything well by themselves; people need helps from others. For instance, one of my friends, who is a dentist, need to get a patient for her examination case. She couldn't find the patient until the last week before the exam, so she walked into the engineering club, asking to join the volunteer program. After couple days in the engineering club, she gained many new friends and finally got the patient for her examination. Clearly, making new friends is beneficial.
Secondly, knowing new friends can help people learn new aspect in life. People cannot get any new perspective by spending time with the same old people or activities. In contrast, the more exposure to new societies or communities enhance the experience and, as a result, people grow. For example, my sister was very shy and didn't like to meet new people. She always has the problem dealing with people. However, after a trip of her internship aboard, she was force to know new people, such as her colleague and her boss. Now she became more confidence and more happy with life than ever before.
In summary, while there are arguments to be made for both sides, it is clear that there are greater advantages making new friends because of the above mentioned reasons. Certainly, expanding the network is more crucial than spending time to keep the old friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
...ople we know, the more benefits we get. Each individuals has various kinds of knowle...
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Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
... more benefits we get. Each individuals has various kinds of knowledge and resource...
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Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...a patient for her examination case. She couldnt find the patient until the last week be...
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Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...For example, my sister was very shy and didnt like to meet new people. She always has...
^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'as for', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in contrast', 'in summary', 'such as', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248677248677 0.261695866417 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.137566137566 0.158904122519 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.100529100529 0.0723426182421 139% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0449735449735 0.0435111971325 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0582010582011 0.0277247811725 210% => OK
Prepositions: 0.121693121693 0.128828473217 94% => OK
Participles: 0.026455026455 0.0370669169778 71% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.55728792812 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0238095238095 0.0208969081088 114% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0873015873016 0.128158765124 68% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0132275132275 0.0158828679856 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0026455026455 0.0114777025283 23% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1937.0 1645.83664459 118% => OK
No of words: 329.0 271.125827815 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.88753799392 6.08160592843 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.04852973271 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.355623100304 0.374372842146 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.270516717325 0.287516216867 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.164133738602 0.187439937562 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.103343465046 0.113142543107 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55728792812 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 145.348785872 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568389057751 0.539623497131 105% => OK
Word variations: 62.3173774838 53.8517498576 116% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0529801325 153% => OK
Sentence length: 16.45 21.7502111507 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1970758984 49.3711431718 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.85 132.220823453 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.45 21.7502111507 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.878197800319 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.39072847682 118% => OK
Readability: 43.5016717325 50.5018328374 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.64835164835 1.90840788429 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334702912722 0.549887131256 61% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0914148545117 0.142949733639 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0744339602631 0.0787303798458 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.460933751354 0.631733273073 73% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.166146210218 0.139662658121 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122812926132 0.266732575781 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750139178594 0.103435571967 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.328707406907 0.414875509568 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0955081643509 0.0530846634433 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252449639545 0.40443939384 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553687572412 0.0528353158467 105% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 4.33554083885 346% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.26048565121 70% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 3.49668874172 172% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.62251655629 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.1766004415 63% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 10.2958057395 78% => OK
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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