the reading passage is about the discovery of old cultural artifacts in the United Kingdom - sohrab
In this set of material the reading passage is about the discovery of old cultural artifacts in the United Kingdom; on the other hand, the listening passage is a lecture by a professor which adds some new information and solution to the reading passage.
According to the reading passage, discovery of old artifacts in the United Kingdom, which they are related to very old cultures; for example, Stone Age and Bronze Age faced some serious problems in earlier century. First of all, writer mentioned the problem with destroyed artifact which is caused by huge construction projects; to explain more, construction projects did not pay attention to the places and buildings in British cities, which they were full of important artifacts. In addition, in that time, there were no financial support for archaeological researches which lead the archeologists to become disappointment in working on research; to explain more, mentioned problem was because of lack of private financial supports, and in that time, there were just government funds available for the mentioned researches. Finally, the lack of job for archaeologists was a huge problem for hiring an expert archaeologist.
According to the listening passage, professor mentioned some new solution for the mentioned problem. First of all, construction companies should be responsible for the buildings that they are going to construct in them; to explain more, they should make sure of safety for old artifacts. In addition, the construction companies are responsible to pay money for investigation. Finally, more jobs for expert archaeologists became available.
Overall, the mentioned problems in the reading passage is completely solved according to the mentioned information in the listening passage
discovery of old artifacts in the United Kingdom, which they are related to very old cultures;
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in British cities, which they were full of important artifacts.
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flaws:
The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Don't need to reiterate the contents of reading passages or as less as possible.
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 19 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 12
No. of Words: 272 250
No. of Characters: 1453 1200
No. of Different Words: 123 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.061 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.342 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.002 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.372 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.416 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.615 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4