Doctors today in the US are persuaded to use electronic medical record systems which could replace the records on paper forms. In that comparing the both methods, there are more benfefits if the patients' medical data stored in the elxectronic database. While the lecturer contends that these benefits are still uncertain. She addresses her views as follows.
Firstly, the electronic medical record systems would not reduce the costs. In the passage it is said that paper ones need considerable amount of storage space as well as the costs of transferring. While there is almost no cost in the elextronice ones as they take up no space and could be accessible easily. While the lecturee disproves that the doctors still need to the paper ones as back up or in emergent situations.Doctors still need the to write down the patients' reocords when eaxming them. Moreover, the paper ones are necessary for the lawyers if they are needed in the lawsuit.
Secondly, as the dorctors still have to use the paper ones when examing the patients.There would be a worker interpret the paper records into the database if the electronic ones in use. Thus it is possbile there are still manual mistakes by those interpreters when they read the doctros' hadn writting.
Thridly, the strict privacy law makes it nearly impossbile that the electronic medical records would help research. In that there is a very strict privact law in the US which protect the individual information from leaking.Thus the patients' informations are difficult to collect together. Even if the researchers want to get any infromation, they would get permissions of the autoritt at first, and they should be allowed to do this by the patients' permissions,too.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ata stored in the elxectronic database. While the lecturer contends that these benefi...
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Suggestion: Doctors
...es as back up or in emergent situations.Doctors still need the to write down the patien...
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Suggestion: There
...he paper ones when examing the patients.There would be a worker interpret the paper r...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...database if the electronic ones in use. Thus it is possbile there are still manual m...
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Suggestion: Thus
...the individual information from leaking.Thus the patients informations are difficult...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...the individual information from leaking.Thus the patients informations are difficult...
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Suggestion: , too
...d to do this by the patients permissions,too.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, still, thus, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 284.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07746478873 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86777130875 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 145.348785872 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531690140845 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7336790441 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06452816374 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0114937774949 0.272083759551 4% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00324794623734 0.0996497079465 3% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0117106366987 0.0662205650399 18% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00564602670524 0.162205337803 3% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00977920511437 0.0443174109184 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 63.6247240618 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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