TOEFL TPO 20 - Integrated Writing Task
The reader claims the three possible theories that discuss the massive effect of the fire, that occurred in the Yellow stone bark in 1988. And the necessity of replacing the let it burn policy with the extinguishing of the forest fire as soon as it happens. On the other hand, the professor counters these specific points and presents clues to call into the information the passage, He refuses each of the author’s reasons.
First, the reader addresses the disaster damage that happened in the Yellow park to the trees and vegetations together especially the small trees. While the speaker encounters this points by telling that the fire is creative and not the only damage and there are the good things that may result after a fire such as the vegetations became more diverse. He says this enhance the opportunity of growing and replacing the damage plants with the new species and also benefits to the seeds which have new land to grow and spread.
Second, the author asserts the decline in the food chains as a result of the burning of the small animals who did not have a chance to escape from the fire and the corresponding effect on the large animals like deer. The professor casts doubt on this by explaining that the new opportunities for the small trees to grow that are the ideal for the little animals such as rabbits and this make the food chains more strong.
Third, the reader disputes the retrograding in the tourism after the fire that led to the decline in the local economy. The professor asserts that the visitors continue to visit the park after the fire and each year after that. And many collecting factors should be presented to make the fire happen again such as very dry weathers and low rainfall and higher temperatures, and this not occurs anymore after 1988.
Essay evaluation report
to call into the information the passage,
to call into the information in the passage,
by explaining that the new opportunities for the small trees to grow that are the ideal for the little animals
by explaining the new opportunities for the small trees to grow that are the ideal for the little animals //remove 'that'
and this not occurs anymore after 1988.
and this does not occur anymore after 1988.
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flaws:
No. of Words: 313 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 12
No. of Words: 313 250
No. of Characters: 1453 1200
No. of Different Words: 157 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.206 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.642 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.336 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.101 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.637 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, so, third, while, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 313.0 270.72406181 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74121405751 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41381360849 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501597444089 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 451.8 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.6315133266 49.2860985944 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.909090909 110.228320801 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4545454545 21.698381199 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270047585552 0.272083759551 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106387720733 0.0996497079465 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702571939655 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156837538296 0.162205337803 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148857321313 0.0443174109184 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.3589403974 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 11.0289183223 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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